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Comment from pome lover
this is hysterical. Loved it.
can't quite figger out why it started with Part 111 and 1V, but your wit and imagination run rampant. Laughed out loud in several places - am sure you never had a grit in your life! (They're good!)
will read more later.
This is really fun.
pome lover
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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this is hysterical. Loved it.
can't quite figger out why it started with Part 111 and 1V, but your wit and imagination run rampant. Laughed out loud in several places - am sure you never had a grit in your life! (They're good!)
will read more later.
This is really fun.
pome lover
Comment Written 14-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much for this 6* rating. It was worth waiting for. I tried writing new parts but couldn't come match the previous ones.
You are so kind to go back and review this.
Marv
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Marv. Your story starts off with a "bang"--"He works in the paint department and also doubles as ladder holder on steep hills." Next, "but I know she's pretty happy, since she left me with all the kids." Segment about Little Larry is very good. Segment of Kathie Hatfield and Herman is also good. Kathie telling about her family is hilarious.
I would like to see you continue on with this series, writing amusing stories about the sign shop. Something you know. Your humor combined with your characters would be a hit. Merry Christmas to you, too. Marilyn
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2015
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Hi Marv. Your story starts off with a "bang"--"He works in the paint department and also doubles as ladder holder on steep hills." Next, "but I know she's pretty happy, since she left me with all the kids." Segment about Little Larry is very good. Segment of Kathie Hatfield and Herman is also good. Kathie telling about her family is hilarious.
I would like to see you continue on with this series, writing amusing stories about the sign shop. Something you know. Your humor combined with your characters would be a hit. Merry Christmas to you, too. Marilyn
Comment Written 23-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2015
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Marilyn
Thanks for your kind and encouraging review. I'm happy that so many segments appealed to you.
The idea of writing The Story of Cook Art & Signs has been in the back of my mind for many years. Your encouragement has made me think that now is the time to begin. Thanks for the push and the compliments.
Your review makes for a very nice Christmas present.
Marv
Comment from Pyrrho
It's been a pretty busy year for Ellie & me. ... delete "pretty". it ads naught and slows your pace.
excepting his letter said Ruthie May. ... said=>read.
Your paragraph 4 is about as comprehensible as Trump.
" ... John's mother so bad, this ...." bad=>badly
Frankly, I could make no sense of this and the writing quality is not excellent.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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It's been a pretty busy year for Ellie & me. ... delete "pretty". it ads naught and slows your pace.
excepting his letter said Ruthie May. ... said=>read.
Your paragraph 4 is about as comprehensible as Trump.
" ... John's mother so bad, this ...." bad=>badly
Frankly, I could make no sense of this and the writing quality is not excellent.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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The things you pointed out, although valid under ordinary circumstances, do not apply here because this is how two employees of a company have expressed themselves in a company Christmas Letter.
I can't seem to find the words to convince FS that this four part letter has nothing to do with my novel, ?The Magic Title.?
I don't expect to win any prizes for these pieces, written by four fictional employees of a company, but they were written only for the sake of humor.
I hope this helps you to see what my goal was.
Marv
Comment from Jay Squires
Marv, I think you know exactly what you're doing. Put away the red pencil, reviewers, there's no chastising Marv on his grammar or spelling what with Fred at the writing helm
This is actually very humorous writing. You show good comedic timing (judging from just the one example below.
I used to think he wasn't mine, but after talking to my ex's, it turns out he's the only one who is. [Hahaha! Good line, Marv.
You say this is the last post before the NEW YEAR? Hey if Tom won't let us have the time off, why are you so special? Hey, my friend, have a wonderful and delightful Christmas and a published New Year.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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Marv, I think you know exactly what you're doing. Put away the red pencil, reviewers, there's no chastising Marv on his grammar or spelling what with Fred at the writing helm
This is actually very humorous writing. You show good comedic timing (judging from just the one example below.
I used to think he wasn't mine, but after talking to my ex's, it turns out he's the only one who is. [Hahaha! Good line, Marv.
You say this is the last post before the NEW YEAR? Hey if Tom won't let us have the time off, why are you so special? Hey, my friend, have a wonderful and delightful Christmas and a published New Year.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
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Jay
Thank you, thank you, thank you for a most generous Christmas present. To give just one example of why I'm so thankful: ?Put away the red pencils, reviewers,?
When I said ?That's it,? I meant no more Christmas Letter until next year. BTW, I hope you were able to read all four parts.
I can't seem to find the words to convince FS that this has nothing to do with my novel, ?The Magic Title.?
Who is Tom?
A published New Year! What's that like?
Marv
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Tom is the big Kahuna here at FanStory. I forget what I wrote about him, but it must have been good.
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Jay
One of my reviewers actually started pointing out the grammar mistakes and inaccurate word choices. Too bad he didn't read your review, first.
Enjoy the season.
Marv