Christine's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "Still Smokin Hot"Poems /stories on Fanstory
12 total reviews
Comment from angel123
Your love poem flows and rhymes well and your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts. Good alliteration of L words in your first sentence.
Angel123
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
  |
Your love poem flows and rhymes well and your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts. Good alliteration of L words in your first sentence.
Angel123
Comment Written 23-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
-
Hi angel113 I thank you for this review and encouraging comments Had fun with this one Cheers
Comment from bcwoods
Good poem. I especially enjoyed the image with the poem, You met the rule of the poem but the third sentence was a little awkward.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
 |
Good poem. I especially enjoyed the image with the poem, You met the rule of the poem but the third sentence was a little awkward.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
-
Hi bcwoods. Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem just a bit of fun with this one, appreciate your comments and good rating Cheers
Comment from Dean Kuch
Loved the alliteration in this, especially the first line, as well as the title.
Wow! Forty years of marriage is a long time. My wife walked out on our marriage after twenty-two-years.
Good luck in going another 40 years, and best of luck in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
|
Loved the alliteration in this, especially the first line, as well as the title.
Wow! Forty years of marriage is a long time. My wife walked out on our marriage after twenty-two-years.
Good luck in going another 40 years, and best of luck in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 23-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
-
Thank you Dean for your review and good luck wishes, all a bit of fun . No it will be 42 years in April next year I think I will stay around. I bet that was hard for you after so many years. Its not all sweet and rosy all the time but we get along well and we a great family so must be doing something right. I hope you find someone else. Cheers Christine😃 he has just brought a Triumph Thunderbird Storm motorbike it is great and I look forward to many trips away with him on the bike this Summer, so it will be Ma and Pa away while the kids are home ha ha. ( all grown up ) Cheers
-
Yes, it was hard, Christine. I loved her more than anything and always thought we would grow old together. Turns out she made other plans.
You're very welcome.
Happy Holidays.
~Dean
-
Yes, it was hard, Christine. I loved her more than anything and always thought we would grow old together. Turns out she made other plans.
You're very welcome.
Happy Holidays.
~Dean
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an exceellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the love that still burns bright. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
|
this is an exceellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the love that still burns bright. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 23-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
-
Hi sweetwoodjax. Thanks for reading my 15 word Love poem all comes from the heart and I have a good man Cheers Christine 😃
Comment from MissMerri
Ssssssst! Hot stuff here! Very nice love poem in only fifteen words. The words you chose are very expressive and say plenty. No one will doubt you have lots of love for your spouse. Way to go!! Good luck in this contest. I think you've got a wonderful entry here.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
|
Ssssssst! Hot stuff here! Very nice love poem in only fifteen words. The words you chose are very expressive and say plenty. No one will doubt you have lots of love for your spouse. Way to go!! Good luck in this contest. I think you've got a wonderful entry here.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2015
-
Hi MissMeri. Thank so much for reading my Love poem. I had a bit of fun with this one and thought how can one do justice to a Love poem in 15 words so it's a bit out there LOL . yes I have a good man too Cheers Christine 😃
Comment from Jared_L
Ok so this really sucks! You entered the same contest I did and yours is awesome!!!!! I had to come see your work after reviewing one of your other pieces.
15 words is really hard to come up with the quality of what you have here, I know, I tried. The design you used is simple yet very effective at alliterating the thesis you desire.
I really like the way you started with three words as the first line and then the second identified them as the thesis with a perfect meter and rhyme.
I hope you don't mind but I am going after every poem you have posted!!!! This is the first time on here that I have read every work of an author....
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
|
Ok so this really sucks! You entered the same contest I did and yours is awesome!!!!! I had to come see your work after reviewing one of your other pieces.
15 words is really hard to come up with the quality of what you have here, I know, I tried. The design you used is simple yet very effective at alliterating the thesis you desire.
I really like the way you started with three words as the first line and then the second identified them as the thesis with a perfect meter and rhyme.
I hope you don't mind but I am going after every poem you have posted!!!! This is the first time on here that I have read every work of an author....
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
-
Hi Jared and no I am thrilled you want to go after my work I hope I wont dissapoint you as some are a bit wierd but written in the light a contest criteria or just because LOL and I too am relatively new to this site but have met some wonderful writers and look forward to more of our correspondence. and Thanks again for reading this one too Cheers
Comment from trumby
This is good. It shows love everlasting . Love eternal.
This is the way that my wife looks at me. This is the devotion that we show towards each other. I talk about those feelings in my story, "A Night of Passion". It's in m portfolio. Please tell me what you think of it.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
|
This is good. It shows love everlasting . Love eternal.
This is the way that my wife looks at me. This is the devotion that we show towards each other. I talk about those feelings in my story, "A Night of Passion". It's in m portfolio. Please tell me what you think of it.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
-
Hi trumby I am glad you thought this good and thanks for your great rating, yes one has to keep the passion flowing, and I will check your portfolio out Cheers
Comment from Gloria ....
Yep, I'd say you've captured the moment of a lifetime in too hot after all these years. Forty and still going strong, now that is a testimony to true love.
Very nicely written. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
|
Yep, I'd say you've captured the moment of a lifetime in too hot after all these years. Forty and still going strong, now that is a testimony to true love.
Very nicely written. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
-
Thanks so much Gloris for stoppimg by to have a read and thenreview my poem for this Love poem contest. I looked at the 15 word limit and thought how can I do that and so this came out . Glad you like it and thanks for your best wishes CheersThan
Comment from royowen
This is a little different to the love poem I'm used you, also the wording is a lot more lustful than I've seen, it's still legitimate but a little more like a tanka than the rhyming quatrain, free verse couplet or sonnet, so well done, well written blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
|
This is a little different to the love poem I'm used you, also the wording is a lot more lustful than I've seen, it's still legitimate but a little more like a tanka than the rhyming quatrain, free verse couplet or sonnet, so well done, well written blessings, Roy
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
-
With many Thanks Roy for reading and giving me feedback I' m not sure what style it is I just used 15 words and this is what Came out, always a bit of fun to think up something a bit different LOL I' m glad you liked it Cheers to you
-
Well done,
Comment from foxangie123
Very nice and in tune with the contest and the prompt. It is nicely passionate and gives a warm glow to the reader which is hard in so few words. You mastered it though. Outstanding......
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
|
Very nice and in tune with the contest and the prompt. It is nicely passionate and gives a warm glow to the reader which is hard in so few words. You mastered it though. Outstanding......
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
-
Thank you very much foxangie123 I appreciate you great review and support for my poem. Your words make me very Happy Cheers
-
Thank you very much foxangie123 I appreciate you great review and support for my poem. Your words make me very Happy Cheers
-
Welcome.
-
Much deserved.