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Comment from pome lover
Marv - you are a total nut! (where I'm from that means you are a funny man.)
Must read the next part. suspense is pulling me on.
good writing. he needs a boost to the ego - some SC.
pome lover
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Marv - you are a total nut! (where I'm from that means you are a funny man.)
Must read the next part. suspense is pulling me on.
good writing. he needs a boost to the ego - some SC.
pome lover
Comment Written 14-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thanks again for going back and reviewing my earlier work. I appreciate the high rating for this segment.
What does, ?some SC? mean?
Comment from barkingdog
Ha-ha, Marvin.
This is so funny.
I think Sam's had a bit too much to drink, or the copy fluid fumes have affected his memory.
It's good that he'll get out just in time before the new folks move in.
-That's the second time she's done this to me(,) and it's starting to annoy me a little.
Happy Holidays.
:) e
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Ha-ha, Marvin.
This is so funny.
I think Sam's had a bit too much to drink, or the copy fluid fumes have affected his memory.
It's good that he'll get out just in time before the new folks move in.
-That's the second time she's done this to me(,) and it's starting to annoy me a little.
Happy Holidays.
:) e
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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It's a shame you missed Part I. Here's an excerpt: re-set the recording of the barking dog (Mr. Cook?s version of a security system) I wrote that long before I met you.
Anyhow, I'm glad you thought Chapter II was funny. You're helping to make the holidays happy for me by your positive review.
I plan on sending the next part on Dec. 23.
I hope you enjoy everything this season has to offer.
Marv
Comment from Jay Squires
This is a cute story (letter). Part II? I don't recall having read part I. At any rate, the idea is fairly clear that Sam is woefully nagged by Puddin'. And when Puddin' left, allegedly to go on a cruise, and without the money it would have cost to take the cruise, we would think Sam might be a tad concerned. Instead, Sam's a tad relieved, and over time one happy and nag-free dude. And then his Puddin' calls and tells him he needs to move, since the house has been sold to another family.
It was a fun read, Marv and will be funner when the threads are tied together.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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This is a cute story (letter). Part II? I don't recall having read part I. At any rate, the idea is fairly clear that Sam is woefully nagged by Puddin'. And when Puddin' left, allegedly to go on a cruise, and without the money it would have cost to take the cruise, we would think Sam might be a tad concerned. Instead, Sam's a tad relieved, and over time one happy and nag-free dude. And then his Puddin' calls and tells him he needs to move, since the house has been sold to another family.
It was a fun read, Marv and will be funner when the threads are tied together.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Jay
Thanks for reviewing this part of the ?Christmas Letter,? 2015. Glad you enjoyed it.
Sorry you missed Part I, which I sent out Dec. 19.
About this submission: Due to the required formatting, I lost control of the title, chapters and parts. At first, FS called it a prologue and linked it to my novel, The Magic Title.?
The four parts of the ?Christmas Letter? have nothing to do with my novel, ?The Magic Title.?
Sorry to say, there won't be any tying of threads. The ?Christmas Letter? is comprised of four parts, each written by a different employee of Cook Art & Signs and the first two parts are over and done with.
I hope you're able to find Part I, if you like.
Thanks for the stars.
Marv
Comment from BeasPeas
An interesting story. Clarification is needed here and there to satisfy me. I know it's just a humorous story, but, oh those loose ends, i.e., Puddin apparently left after Christmas, then I guess she came back. Then she left again in June. The house has been sold out from under him. So is Sam going to join Puddin at the new house or are they splitsville for good? Looking toward the next segment to see how this ends. Marilyn
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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An interesting story. Clarification is needed here and there to satisfy me. I know it's just a humorous story, but, oh those loose ends, i.e., Puddin apparently left after Christmas, then I guess she came back. Then she left again in June. The house has been sold out from under him. So is Sam going to join Puddin at the new house or are they splitsville for good? Looking toward the next segment to see how this ends. Marilyn
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Marilyn
This piece is chapter 2 (or Part II) of the Christmas Letter and has nothing to do with my novel, ?The Magic Title.?
Chapter 3 (Part III) will be written by another employee of Cook Art & Signs, as will chapter 4, unless I combine the two.
Puddin tells Sam, ?We bought a new house, so don't worry about him.
Two new contributors will finish the letter.
Thanks for reviewing and all those stars.
Marv
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Hi Marv. I know this isn't part of the novel. You do well with your characters and dialogue. Interesting and humorous. Marilyn
Comment from Sherylsart
I haven't read the previous parts, but think this is really cute. Easy to follow, no glitches I can see. I love the image of him standing there and the burly guys are coming up the driveway. She must be a piece of work.
Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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I haven't read the previous parts, but think this is really cute. Easy to follow, no glitches I can see. I love the image of him standing there and the burly guys are coming up the driveway. She must be a piece of work.
Great job.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Shery
Thanks for the fine rating.
This piece is chapter 2 of the Christmas Letter and has nothing to do with my novel, ?The Magic Title.? I submitted Chapter 1 (of the ?Christmas Letter? on December 19.)
Chapter 3 will be written by another employee of Cook Art & Signs, as will chapter 4, unless I combine the two.
Thanks for reviewing.
I hope this Christmas will be one you recall with great fondness.
Marv
Comment from JW
Even though I have not read the previous part of this story, I do have to admit this funny. Under abnormal circumstances, I could see something like this occurring.
It will be interesting to see where this story leads.
Thanks for sharing it and do have a Happy Holiday. JW
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Even though I have not read the previous part of this story, I do have to admit this funny. Under abnormal circumstances, I could see something like this occurring.
It will be interesting to see where this story leads.
Thanks for sharing it and do have a Happy Holiday. JW
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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JW
Thanks for reviewing this piece, which is chapter 2 of the Christmas Letter and has nothing to do with my novel, ?The Magic Title.? I submitted Chapter 1 (of the ?Christmas Letter? on December 19.
This story will not lead anywhere, since chapter 3 will be written by another employee of Cook Art & Signs, as will chapter 4.
Thanks for the fine rating.
I hope you and your loved ones have a merry Christmas and a better new year.
Marv