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Comment from BeasPeas
This is another interesting segment to your story. Russ is more candid to another person (Dolores) about his practice of selling his script with nothing in it. It seems to me she already knows his "character" and the "scam" (if it can be called that) to sell nothing to anybody who will give him front money. Will have to see how this wraps up. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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This is another interesting segment to your story. Russ is more candid to another person (Dolores) about his practice of selling his script with nothing in it. It seems to me she already knows his "character" and the "scam" (if it can be called that) to sell nothing to anybody who will give him front money. Will have to see how this wraps up. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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The review I've been waiting for. Thanks for the excellent rating. Your input shows I'm on the right track. You may understand the story better than I.
Marv
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Hi Bill. I have been off-line for a couple of days due to other things and slowly catching up on my reading and reviewing. Marilyn
Comment from Jay Squires
Hey, Marv. I really enjoyed reading this. I had some problems in the past because of a lack of speech tags. Remember? Now, I had no problems knowing which character was speaking. If I were to make any suggestion at all it would be to try to insert a little description between the dialogue, something to give the reader a sense of place. It just dawned on me, since this is about a scriptwriter that you might well adopt the play format.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Hey, Marv. I really enjoyed reading this. I had some problems in the past because of a lack of speech tags. Remember? Now, I had no problems knowing which character was speaking. If I were to make any suggestion at all it would be to try to insert a little description between the dialogue, something to give the reader a sense of place. It just dawned on me, since this is about a scriptwriter that you might well adopt the play format.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Jay
Thanks for reviewing chapter 27. It's difficult to believe it deserves this rating but I have to trust your judgment.
Yes, I remember the lack of speech tags. Now, it's the last thing I check.
I'm going to try inserting more description. Use of your play formatting idea is worth considering.
Thank you very much for your interest and insight.
Marv
Comment from Pyrrho
Prose and dialog are excellent and free of SPAG but I have to admit to becoming totally lost somewhere about the middle and the further I read, the loster I got.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Prose and dialog are excellent and free of SPAG but I have to admit to becoming totally lost somewhere about the middle and the further I read, the loster I got.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Pyrrho
Thanks for the positive review. Becoming lost is understandable. You might want to read earlier chapters.
Thanks for the stars.
Marv
