Scenes
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Scene at a Library"Pons and Ned meet at different locations
9 total reviews
Comment from suep
I love libraries and this scene did not disappoint. Loved the opening line. I know many who say LIE BERRY and it drives me crazy! Great scene. I hope Pons and Ned have many more journeys ahead... :)
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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I love libraries and this scene did not disappoint. Loved the opening line. I know many who say LIE BERRY and it drives me crazy! Great scene. I hope Pons and Ned have many more journeys ahead... :)
Comment Written 07-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Thank you, suep, for this a look as well. Bill
Comment from amada
I liked this nonsense story, I needed that today...Besides, the library is one of my favorite places to be. It reminded me of Carrie, the Stephen King huge success. Great!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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I liked this nonsense story, I needed that today...Besides, the library is one of my favorite places to be. It reminded me of Carrie, the Stephen King huge success. Great!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Amada for the excellent review. I'm glad it cheered you up. Bill
Comment from Reedblitzerman
Fun. It seems you're enjoying the language and we're enjoying it along with you. It's nice as well to see the banter between the two. It makes sense that they're family. If not brothers (and they're not) then cousins is a nice fit. And of course we probably all like The King.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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Fun. It seems you're enjoying the language and we're enjoying it along with you. It's nice as well to see the banter between the two. It makes sense that they're family. If not brothers (and they're not) then cousins is a nice fit. And of course we probably all like The King.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Reed, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Touch of humor thrown into this well written poem.
These two hillbilly hicks are spot on.
Can see this scene actually playing out in a lie berry.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Touch of humor thrown into this well written poem.
These two hillbilly hicks are spot on.
Can see this scene actually playing out in a lie berry.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Brett, for the positive review. Bill
Comment from Jay Squires
You're creating a real catalog of characters with this Pons and Ned. They are the Laurel and Hardy, Dean and Jerry, Simon and Shuster, Shit and Shinola of comedy teams. Seriously, though, I do like them. They play well off each other.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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You're creating a real catalog of characters with this Pons and Ned. They are the Laurel and Hardy, Dean and Jerry, Simon and Shuster, Shit and Shinola of comedy teams. Seriously, though, I do like them. They play well off each other.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Jay, for the encouragement and the awesome comparisons. Bill
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! I enjoyed this, even if you didn't promote it and I got a lousy two cents. BUt it was worth typing a review just the same, because I like your bizarre mind, and this story is typical Bill. :)
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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LOL! I enjoyed this, even if you didn't promote it and I got a lousy two cents. BUt it was worth typing a review just the same, because I like your bizarre mind, and this story is typical Bill. :)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Sorry, but happy you reviewed this. I got busy and didn't get back to it before it was read.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hahahaha...I think that Mr. King himself would appreciate the humor in this, Bill. I'll be sure to forward it to him. He'll get a kick out of it. Of course I'd left him know who wrote it, and only if you give me permission to do so, of course.
Funny stuff. Pons and Ned is a great series, a typical straight man/funny man routine.
Great work, and thanks for the laugh! ~Dean ;)
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Hahahaha...I think that Mr. King himself would appreciate the humor in this, Bill. I'll be sure to forward it to him. He'll get a kick out of it. Of course I'd left him know who wrote it, and only if you give me permission to do so, of course.
Funny stuff. Pons and Ned is a great series, a typical straight man/funny man routine.
Great work, and thanks for the laugh! ~Dean ;)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Dean, for the great review. You bet I'd like you to forward it. I appreciate it tremendously. Bill
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Consider it done then, Bill. You're very welcome.
~Dean ;)
Comment from writeapoem
I enjoyed the adventure in the Lie berry looking for a fruitful book. Humorously written I thought. And where shall Ned and Pons go next?
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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I enjoyed the adventure in the Lie berry looking for a fruitful book. Humorously written I thought. And where shall Ned and Pons go next?
Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Thank you for giving this a look. Bill
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Your welcome
Comment from F. Wehr3
I like the play on words of the piece and the playful banter with the boys.
I felt there wasn't enough. Usually in a script, you would have some description of the scene, a set-up, and then stage directions of some sort. I'm not an expert in scripts, but I would read other scripts to see what others are doing.
It's a nice first draft. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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I like the play on words of the piece and the playful banter with the boys.
I felt there wasn't enough. Usually in a script, you would have some description of the scene, a set-up, and then stage directions of some sort. I'm not an expert in scripts, but I would read other scripts to see what others are doing.
It's a nice first draft. Best of luck.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Thank you for giving this a look. Bill
