Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 " First, With Words"A collection of sonnets
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Comment from Jesse James Doty
Whoa, that's pretty steamy stuff. No one can read this poem and not get turned on. Impressive style and rhymes. Well done. If I had a Six Star to give you, I certainly would. Thanks for the turn on.
Peace, Jesse James
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Whoa, that's pretty steamy stuff. No one can read this poem and not get turned on. Impressive style and rhymes. Well done. If I had a Six Star to give you, I certainly would. Thanks for the turn on.
Peace, Jesse James
Comment Written 05-Dec-2015
Comment from Unspoken94
It's my last six. This piece is beautifully
crafted and your explanation was interesting
but irrelevant. This poem stands on its own, no
matter what kind of poem it is labeled. I
thank you both for putting in the effort to
make an exceptional piece. It's the best of the
day for me. -Bill
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It's my last six. This piece is beautifully
crafted and your explanation was interesting
but irrelevant. This poem stands on its own, no
matter what kind of poem it is labeled. I
thank you both for putting in the effort to
make an exceptional piece. It's the best of the
day for me. -Bill
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
Comment from RGstar
This was a passionate one, Mikey...you surprise me! Bravo.
One thing: I would change " quick" to quickly if it does not spoil the form...the adverb explains how. If , for syllable purposes, you need it to stay so, then it is fine..poetic license, in this case, gives reason.
Nicely passionate
Anticipating
Salivating
Undulating
How much better can it get.
Good write, my friend.
Have a great day.
You do a great job here on Fs, especially mentioned, the compassionate side for our mother figure. Adewpearl.
Best wishes,
RGstar
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This was a passionate one, Mikey...you surprise me! Bravo.
One thing: I would change " quick" to quickly if it does not spoil the form...the adverb explains how. If , for syllable purposes, you need it to stay so, then it is fine..poetic license, in this case, gives reason.
Nicely passionate
Anticipating
Salivating
Undulating
How much better can it get.
Good write, my friend.
Have a great day.
You do a great job here on Fs, especially mentioned, the compassionate side for our mother figure. Adewpearl.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
Comment from TPAC
Perfect. Great flow, I found in this write, delighting conveyances and tingling antics to the brain. Descriptive in its line structuring and captivating in statements made. A super good read.
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Perfect. Great flow, I found in this write, delighting conveyances and tingling antics to the brain. Descriptive in its line structuring and captivating in statements made. A super good read.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
Comment from Mai Mai
Wow! Is this piece hot or what? Very steamy piece I must say -- and I like it. Very good work. Good luck.
Mai Mai
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Wow! Is this piece hot or what? Very steamy piece I must say -- and I like it. Very good work. Good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
Comment from Pantygynt
This is something else again. I loved Gloria's lento but this version, an heroic, monorhyming lento-sonnet, just takes my breath away. Not only that but in fourteen of the eighteen lines the end rhyme is feminine (over more than one syllable.
This is both beautiful and erotic without being in any way pornographic. What an absolutely wonderful take on the lento idea. I just wish I had a six about my person.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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This is something else again. I loved Gloria's lento but this version, an heroic, monorhyming lento-sonnet, just takes my breath away. Not only that but in fourteen of the eighteen lines the end rhyme is feminine (over more than one syllable.
This is both beautiful and erotic without being in any way pornographic. What an absolutely wonderful take on the lento idea. I just wish I had a six about my person.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2015
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Wow. I'm quite honored. It's always an added bonus when a review comes from someone with great knowledge and skill. I confess, I pestered Gloria to death for her help with this as I saw it transforming into something I thougt was good. Thank you so much. This makes me want to write! mikey
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is food for thought. I have read your biographical details too and you are right. I have improved while writing on this website too.
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This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is food for thought. I have read your biographical details too and you are right. I have improved while writing on this website too.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Steamy and sensual. I can tell you've put a lot of work into this poem. It's very well done.
"Smash against my lips, I'm salivating;
thrash within my grasp, I'm undulating."
Was this written for a certain somebody? ;)
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Steamy and sensual. I can tell you've put a lot of work into this poem. It's very well done.
"Smash against my lips, I'm salivating;
thrash within my grasp, I'm undulating."
Was this written for a certain somebody? ;)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
Comment from c_lucas
I don't see where your post requires a warning. As usual, it is very well written with a fast past of words. There is very good imagery. Keep up the good work.
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I don't see where your post requires a warning. As usual, it is very well written with a fast past of words. There is very good imagery. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
Comment from evilynne
I'm so lousy with poetic formats, syllables, etc. I still don't get it (I read both other poems), but your poem is well written and quite steamy. Evi
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I'm so lousy with poetic formats, syllables, etc. I still don't get it (I read both other poems), but your poem is well written and quite steamy. Evi
Comment Written 03-Dec-2015
