A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Heart-song For Love"Assorted poems of love
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Comment from pbroussard209
great poem and so very true, it is easy to get caught up in love and all the emotions that go along with it. it is also easy to miss the little signs that the one you love does not have the same intense feelings. I have been there done that twice, and I learned my lesson. I have also done it to others, and I felt bad when I realized the person I was dating was in love with me, and I did not feel the same about them. it was painful on both sides of the coin. being the one hurt and hurting someone you cared about.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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great poem and so very true, it is easy to get caught up in love and all the emotions that go along with it. it is also easy to miss the little signs that the one you love does not have the same intense feelings. I have been there done that twice, and I learned my lesson. I have also done it to others, and I felt bad when I realized the person I was dating was in love with me, and I did not feel the same about them. it was painful on both sides of the coin. being the one hurt and hurting someone you cared about.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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Thank you, sweetie for reading and reviewing after there is no reward... I will fix that :)
Missy
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The reward is getting to read your work. :)
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Missy,
now the writing of this is beautifully sad... the visual, so hauntingly unavailable, yet with a giving presence.
I do find the set out a tad off putting for an acrostic though... Once upon a time is a great fairytale start, but does not fit into the scheme... and it would have been wonderful if you could have had your Love lined up underneath the...
F......
O......
R.......
LOVE ONLY VESTED-ENTER...
It's just that being an acrostic poem, it should remain that structurally, as I kept hoping the 'love only vested enter' would also line up as an acrostic... but as many times as I kept hoping... nah, it was never going to be.
Now, getting back to the poem 'for your friend'... as I read and re-read... wondering if anyone really knows how anything would or could possibly end?
Love has a way of leading our hearts, but not our heads... and so for me, the heart can never be wrong... it can be a tad naive or trusting, but no, never wrong.
There is so many layers in between every meaning... and I feel I read way too much into what I assume... and I'm not one to second guess, only interpret what it may mean to me as I dive beneath the surface to observe every angle.
Yes Missy, very haunting, very lingering and well, left me a tad hollow with that feeling of nervousness as the butterflies gathered... so in that way, very effective... yes, you always write straight from the heart which gives authenticity to your words and intent... albeit sad, a very beautiful poem.
With our thoughts we create,
the truth of love,
James vx's.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Hi Missy,
now the writing of this is beautifully sad... the visual, so hauntingly unavailable, yet with a giving presence.
I do find the set out a tad off putting for an acrostic though... Once upon a time is a great fairytale start, but does not fit into the scheme... and it would have been wonderful if you could have had your Love lined up underneath the...
F......
O......
R.......
LOVE ONLY VESTED-ENTER...
It's just that being an acrostic poem, it should remain that structurally, as I kept hoping the 'love only vested enter' would also line up as an acrostic... but as many times as I kept hoping... nah, it was never going to be.
Now, getting back to the poem 'for your friend'... as I read and re-read... wondering if anyone really knows how anything would or could possibly end?
Love has a way of leading our hearts, but not our heads... and so for me, the heart can never be wrong... it can be a tad naive or trusting, but no, never wrong.
There is so many layers in between every meaning... and I feel I read way too much into what I assume... and I'm not one to second guess, only interpret what it may mean to me as I dive beneath the surface to observe every angle.
Yes Missy, very haunting, very lingering and well, left me a tad hollow with that feeling of nervousness as the butterflies gathered... so in that way, very effective... yes, you always write straight from the heart which gives authenticity to your words and intent... albeit sad, a very beautiful poem.
With our thoughts we create,
the truth of love,
James vx's.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Just as in one-sided love ...things are a lil off putting my sweet friend. I am sorry you let that bother you.
I don't feel I deserve the 6 then if it was off putting at all.
You are a review I look for so thank you for always being here.
Always,
Missy
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Well, I did consider the structure a tad off putting, but I believe the essence of the poem to be worth every bit of each star... like I said, layered thought... vx's.
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Thank you, James :)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
F or there is no love with only one
O ur hearts need two to be complete
R ight or wrong, there must be two.
So true - to love and not have that love
returned must be truly heart-breaking.
an acrostic isn't the easiest of styles,
but you've presented it well, Mel
the letters after the poem are somewhat
scattered.
Margaret
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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F or there is no love with only one
O ur hearts need two to be complete
R ight or wrong, there must be two.
So true - to love and not have that love
returned must be truly heart-breaking.
an acrostic isn't the easiest of styles,
but you've presented it well, Mel
the letters after the poem are somewhat
scattered.
Margaret
Comment Written 12-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Sorry about the letters being off...I worked til I was blue in the face with it. LOL
Thank you so much for the lovely review, Margaret.
Always,
Missy
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Lovely poem Justafan (name not visible on the black background) - about a love that went wrong. An age old subject that never ceases to interest the poet in us. Good advice - It Takes Two. Good author notes. So true we cannot give all of ourselves if we are to pursue our own life happily - being joined at the hip is not a comfortable place to be. Wrm rgards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Lovely poem Justafan (name not visible on the black background) - about a love that went wrong. An age old subject that never ceases to interest the poet in us. Good advice - It Takes Two. Good author notes. So true we cannot give all of ourselves if we are to pursue our own life happily - being joined at the hip is not a comfortable place to be. Wrm rgards Dorothy x
Comment Written 12-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Hello, Dorothy, thank you for the lovely and supportive review :)
Missy
Comment from Dawn Munro
Hmmm...I hesitate to rate this as it deserves...curious as to why? I doubt you would, but just in case you might think my rating of your splendid poem was 'tit for tat' - but I cannot read such a gorgeous (though infinitely sad) acrostic and not award it the stars it deserves!
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Hmmm...I hesitate to rate this as it deserves...curious as to why? I doubt you would, but just in case you might think my rating of your splendid poem was 'tit for tat' - but I cannot read such a gorgeous (though infinitely sad) acrostic and not award it the stars it deserves!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Hi my lil puddin pop!! I hope you are feeling more like my lil spitfire today.
I am delighted with your review of my work, as always :)
Mwuahhh
Missy
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Hello, Cherry Blossom. *grin* I'm SO glad you're pleased. Mwuahh right back attcha! And a big hug too. :0))
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Hello poet friend. You are on a roll with these love and romance works, I enjoyed it and wish you the best in all you do. I also want to wish you and yours a very wonderful Christmas!
Loyd C Taylor, Sr.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Hello poet friend. You are on a roll with these love and romance works, I enjoyed it and wish you the best in all you do. I also want to wish you and yours a very wonderful Christmas!
Loyd C Taylor, Sr.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Merry Christmas to you as well, Loyd.
Thank you for the lovely review :)
Missy
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It was my pleasure, Merry Christmas! Loyd
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It was my pleasure, Merry Christmas! Loyd
Comment from Linda Engel
Ahem sister. Hold on to that little part of independence just in case you find yourself paddling up river alone. Good poem stating his cunning words turned her heart but underneath the words was lies. Be cautious of those talking pretty words.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Ahem sister. Hold on to that little part of independence just in case you find yourself paddling up river alone. Good poem stating his cunning words turned her heart but underneath the words was lies. Be cautious of those talking pretty words.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Ahem...sista. :)
Thanks for the smile and the review hon.
Missy
Comment from mfowler
This is a difficult medium for poetry and I think you've carried it off very well. I liked your narrative arc and the well honed lines which flow beautifully together. The over all effect is very pleasing. I do prefer your romance pieces to the erotica which 'sometimes' rely on shock rather than poetic effect. This works really well. There is a hitch with that vertical section. The word 'LOVE' is out of alignment with the words below and just needs pushing along.
Really nice work, Missy. Merry Christmas from a writer who left the paid workforce yesterday. (I'm a little bit happy.)
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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This is a difficult medium for poetry and I think you've carried it off very well. I liked your narrative arc and the well honed lines which flow beautifully together. The over all effect is very pleasing. I do prefer your romance pieces to the erotica which 'sometimes' rely on shock rather than poetic effect. This works really well. There is a hitch with that vertical section. The word 'LOVE' is out of alignment with the words below and just needs pushing along.
Really nice work, Missy. Merry Christmas from a writer who left the paid workforce yesterday. (I'm a little bit happy.)
Comment Written 11-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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I changed the last, Mark.
The erotica is something I do as a challenge. Although I love ...love, in all it's varied nuances. LOL
Thank you for the always looked for ...review :)
Missy
Congrats on your new life!
Comment from Leineco
Great Acrostic Justafan :-)
It reads smoothly and tells a sad tale of Love's fickle nature, and the devastating consequences that follow when only one is truly invested. Nicely done :-)
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Great Acrostic Justafan :-)
It reads smoothly and tells a sad tale of Love's fickle nature, and the devastating consequences that follow when only one is truly invested. Nicely done :-)
Comment Written 11-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Thank ya, most kindly, "L".
Wink
Missy
Comment from patcelaw
My mother was one of these ladies. She loved my dad and overlooked a lot of really bad things because of her love for the louse he was. He had affairs and yet she stayed by him, it turned out that what finally broke her love was that he nearly beat my youngest brother to death. He was the 9 born of 10 children. Patricia
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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My mother was one of these ladies. She loved my dad and overlooked a lot of really bad things because of her love for the louse he was. He had affairs and yet she stayed by him, it turned out that what finally broke her love was that he nearly beat my youngest brother to death. He was the 9 born of 10 children. Patricia
Comment Written 11-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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My mother too! I always thought of my mom as tough, but when it came to the last man in her life...ugh!
Thank you for the very supportive and understanding review, Patricia.
Missy