Seasons Of The Heart
A poem that depicts the captivating feeling of the beginning4 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
it truly is the time of year when all comes to life...nature is at it's best...and humans smile...so very nicely written...and a beautiful picture...
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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it truly is the time of year when all comes to life...nature is at it's best...and humans smile...so very nicely written...and a beautiful picture...
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for your thoughtful review.
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you are so very welcome...xxoo luff
Comment from frogbook
Very lovely. A feeling of serenity exudes from the words. Just one small suggestion-the white is great but maybe bolded or a slightly larger font. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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Very lovely. A feeling of serenity exudes from the words. Just one small suggestion-the white is great but maybe bolded or a slightly larger font. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful review and your suggestion. I will look into your idea. Thank you very much.
Comment from Domino 2
I think you mean it to be plural, and if that's the case, it should be written as, 'melodies', in 7th line.
The same applies to [sky's - should be 'skies' in 5th last line]
You don't need the semi-colon after, 'foliage' (check spelling) in 10th line.
Maybe, with respect, dispense with ALL punctuation AND capital letters for a 'cleaner' and simpler presentation of your excellent free verse in celebration of my fave season.
Best wishes, Ray.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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I think you mean it to be plural, and if that's the case, it should be written as, 'melodies', in 7th line.
The same applies to [sky's - should be 'skies' in 5th last line]
You don't need the semi-colon after, 'foliage' (check spelling) in 10th line.
Maybe, with respect, dispense with ALL punctuation AND capital letters for a 'cleaner' and simpler presentation of your excellent free verse in celebration of my fave season.
Best wishes, Ray.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and helpful input. I will make the necessary corrections. Your thoughts are greatly appreciated.
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Thanks for your very gracious reply. I'm humbled you think my suggestions are worthwhile.
Cheers, Ray.
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Again I say thank you very your thoughtful input.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Very beautiful poetry. Our hearts also go through seasons of happiness, sadness, calmness and a season of going to rest. Good luck with the contest
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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Very beautiful poetry. Our hearts also go through seasons of happiness, sadness, calmness and a season of going to rest. Good luck with the contest
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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Thank you Sandra for your thoughtful words. It is so true that our hearts do go through different seasons and those seasons of the heart can be so reminiscent of the seasons that experience at the hands of mother nature. Thank you very much for your well wishes.