Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "It's Crazy"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
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Comment from BeasPeas
I liked your poem very much. I think every woman (well most women anyway) want to have a child/children. Adoption is a fine idea whether we have our own child or not. There are so many older ones who need a loving home. Marilyn
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2015
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I liked your poem very much. I think every woman (well most women anyway) want to have a child/children. Adoption is a fine idea whether we have our own child or not. There are so many older ones who need a loving home. Marilyn
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2015
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Some people I know do not want children. Their mindset is very different from mine.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Aiona,
I enjoyed reading your poem. It's certainly different from other things that I've read. I think you did a great job in writing it. It's sad when women want children and they can't have them.
Kat
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Hi Aiona,
I enjoyed reading your poem. It's certainly different from other things that I've read. I think you did a great job in writing it. It's sad when women want children and they can't have them.
Kat
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Mizkat.
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You are very welcome, my friend. Kat
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. My fiancé and I are trying to have a baby at the moment. She has had miscarriages and we are now going for fertility treatment, but I am slowly resigned to the fact that I will never be a father. Maybe we can adopt. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. My fiancé and I are trying to have a baby at the moment. She has had miscarriages and we are now going for fertility treatment, but I am slowly resigned to the fact that I will never be a father. Maybe we can adopt. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thanks, Tomes. Yes, I remembered you when I dug up this poem. I wrote it about 13 years ago. My husband and I were married 9 years and couldn't conceive. I too was thinking of adopting. There are so many kids here who need homes, it's so sad. Then, I'm not sure what happened, really. I got pregnant at the advanced maternal age of 36. It was a very rough pregnancy. I'll leave the details out. Perhaps it's coincidental, but in those months before I conceived (I now have 3 kids) each time I became pregnant, I received a vial of perfume from a man who studied Middle Eastern perfumery. I tried not to be superstitious about it, but it was funny because he kept sending me vials, and after the second one, I was afraid to open them!!!! I got one again about fall 2013, and lo and behold, I got pregnant again a third time. Creepy. But true. The last one he sent me was Oud Caravan. If you like I can send you a vial. But be careful what you wish for! :)
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Sounds fantastic. I wouldn't want to put you out.
Comment from Domino 2
Very original, interesting and well-expressed theme, Aiona.
I have 3 sisters, and we all have kids except one. She went through years of treatment to conceive, without success, and I know she was heart-broken. She gains some compensation by spending loads of time and sharing much love with her nieces and nephews.
She never thought adoption (your last stanza) an option, and it's not for me to pass an opinion on on that.
I wish you success in your quest for a child of your own, or if that doesn't work out, I wish you happiness and contentment anyway.
Top post.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Very original, interesting and well-expressed theme, Aiona.
I have 3 sisters, and we all have kids except one. She went through years of treatment to conceive, without success, and I know she was heart-broken. She gains some compensation by spending loads of time and sharing much love with her nieces and nephews.
She never thought adoption (your last stanza) an option, and it's not for me to pass an opinion on on that.
I wish you success in your quest for a child of your own, or if that doesn't work out, I wish you happiness and contentment anyway.
Top post.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Oh, thank you,Domino_2, I mean Ray. I have three kids now. I wrote this over a decade ago though, before I had children.
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No probs, Aiona.
Hey, belated congratulations three times over. :-) xx
Comment from Misrael
Yes this world is crazy and people will do almost anything to have children, that is some will while others just want to get rid of them because they are an inconvenience. It does not make sense at all. Good read and keep on writing.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Yes this world is crazy and people will do almost anything to have children, that is some will while others just want to get rid of them because they are an inconvenience. It does not make sense at all. Good read and keep on writing.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Misrael.
Comment from Nosha17
I didn't know there was such a problem with infertility, maybe this problem is worse now than it used to be. Well expressed thoughts and good use of rhyme. Enjoyable read. faye
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I didn't know there was such a problem with infertility, maybe this problem is worse now than it used to be. Well expressed thoughts and good use of rhyme. Enjoyable read. faye
Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thanks, Nosha17. I mean, Faye!
Comment from Jay Squires
I can't tell from the descriptions in the poem whether the two women in the poem who were 43 were the same, and whether there was a connection between the one whose husband died and the other two. I'm looking for a link to connect all three introductions, but can't find it from the evidence given.
I like the tenor of your poem and where I think your are taking us. I'm not a critiquer of poetry, but it seemed to flow nicely. I didn't care much for the colloquial 'cos, especially since it would have done as well with 'cause, which itself is colloquial, but not as 'trendy'.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I can't tell from the descriptions in the poem whether the two women in the poem who were 43 were the same, and whether there was a connection between the one whose husband died and the other two. I'm looking for a link to connect all three introductions, but can't find it from the evidence given.
I like the tenor of your poem and where I think your are taking us. I'm not a critiquer of poetry, but it seemed to flow nicely. I didn't care much for the colloquial 'cos, especially since it would have done as well with 'cause, which itself is colloquial, but not as 'trendy'.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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LOL! Good point. Yeah, I was looking at that and thinking I should change it to 'Cause, too. Glad to see you agree. And yes, thank you for pointing out the ages.... Lemme fix that.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I remember back in my age I got a d&c to be able to get pregnant and there was not such thing as fertility pills unless you paid the price. It was not given out like candy.
Things have changed.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I remember back in my age I got a d&c to be able to get pregnant and there was not such thing as fertility pills unless you paid the price. It was not given out like candy.
Things have changed.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Barb. Was the procedure successful in helping you?
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yes it was twice. First was a baby girl the second was twins
Comment from patcelaw
Aiona, working where you did at the infertility area, I am sure you heard some sad stories. When I was 19 I was a rape victim and became pregnant. My family wanted me to abort, but I chose life and gave up the son for adoption. I met him when he was 35. Got to meet and have a good relationship with his adoptive mother. That mother passed away on Monday.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Aiona, working where you did at the infertility area, I am sure you heard some sad stories. When I was 19 I was a rape victim and became pregnant. My family wanted me to abort, but I chose life and gave up the son for adoption. I met him when he was 35. Got to meet and have a good relationship with his adoptive mother. That mother passed away on Monday.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Oh my.... My condolences. She was like an extension of yourself in a way. We can't be in two places at once, except when we find someone who can do the things we want or need to do, when we cannot be there. That's something special that not many people have.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem. It tells a great story. Infertility is a horrible thing for women who desire children. Your scenarios tell quite different reasons in a nice way. Good job on the flow. I see no changes. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2015
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I enjoyed your poem. It tells a great story. Infertility is a horrible thing for women who desire children. Your scenarios tell quite different reasons in a nice way. Good job on the flow. I see no changes. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2015
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Thank you, jannypan.