A Door To The Past
Beware of strange doors29 total reviews
Comment from brenda bickers
I loved this short story. I too am intrigued by old building and big old houses, and also wonder about past lives gone by. What an interesting twist, I wanted so much to read more. Will there be more? I do hope so.
Brenda
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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I loved this short story. I too am intrigued by old building and big old houses, and also wonder about past lives gone by. What an interesting twist, I wanted so much to read more. Will there be more? I do hope so.
Brenda
Comment Written 28-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
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Thanks. I may write more along the same line. I'm just kind of coasting along now.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello prettybluebirds
I can see why you received 1st prize with your story It kept me wanting to read more.
So do you have more writings of how you like to explore old houses when I get the chance.
And tell us what you imaged.
Gert
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Hello prettybluebirds
I can see why you received 1st prize with your story It kept me wanting to read more.
So do you have more writings of how you like to explore old houses when I get the chance.
And tell us what you imaged.
Gert
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you. No, I haven't done ay exploring lately. Glad you liked the story.
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You are welcome prettybluebirds
Gert
Comment from ann marie mazz
hello prettybluebirds
congratulations on your winning entry
after reading your entry I can see how and why it won
you met the challenge of the door
you every word in the story had my attention
the story line has appeal and heart
the ending is priceless and reaches the reader
thank you for sharing your talent
congratulations again
ann marie
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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hello prettybluebirds
congratulations on your winning entry
after reading your entry I can see how and why it won
you met the challenge of the door
you every word in the story had my attention
the story line has appeal and heart
the ending is priceless and reaches the reader
thank you for sharing your talent
congratulations again
ann marie
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you. I had fun writing the story. I love gooing through old houses and I try to imagine the people who must have lived there.
Comment from Lovinia
HI prettybluebirds
Congratulations! A wonderful story well told. I enjoyed every line. You built intrigue and questioning by the reader. Your character was clear and we learn much of his personality as you progress to your conclusion. A lovely emotional touch with the vision of his mother and himself in a past life, the mother's response and the narrator's is poignant, yet so up-lifting. Reassurance of being loved ... what we all need. I love your conclusion and was taken by surprise ... of course it was the thing to do, yet you explained it so simply . Great heart in your story, emotional, compassion, deep love felt to the very depth of the essence of real love ... all this emanated off the page. I found no spag. Great plot and excellent structure and smooth flow. Well done. You had my vote ... well deserved. You'd have a six if I had any. Huge hugs - Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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HI prettybluebirds
Congratulations! A wonderful story well told. I enjoyed every line. You built intrigue and questioning by the reader. Your character was clear and we learn much of his personality as you progress to your conclusion. A lovely emotional touch with the vision of his mother and himself in a past life, the mother's response and the narrator's is poignant, yet so up-lifting. Reassurance of being loved ... what we all need. I love your conclusion and was taken by surprise ... of course it was the thing to do, yet you explained it so simply . Great heart in your story, emotional, compassion, deep love felt to the very depth of the essence of real love ... all this emanated off the page. I found no spag. Great plot and excellent structure and smooth flow. Well done. You had my vote ... well deserved. You'd have a six if I had any. Huge hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much. I truly enjoyed writing that story. So glad you liked reading it. HUGS! to you too.
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My pleasure. I enjoyed this so much, :))) I do enjoy your writing style. More hugs back 'atcha. lol L xoxo
Comment from frogbook
Very original and well thought out. Clever use of this interesting prompt. Good descriptions. Best of luck in this contest and happy holidays.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Very original and well thought out. Clever use of this interesting prompt. Good descriptions. Best of luck in this contest and happy holidays.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you. Happy holidays to you too.
Comment from alvina224224
A sad but sweet story, author, and well written. Small point...Para 3 line 3 a letter missing, so it reads 'her' instead of 'here'. The story created vivid images, and distinctive emotions. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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A sad but sweet story, author, and well written. Small point...Para 3 line 3 a letter missing, so it reads 'her' instead of 'here'. The story created vivid images, and distinctive emotions. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thanks. I will edit and correct. Thanks for catching the typo. I always appreciate help.
Comment from Cajungirl
I did not spot any SPAG in your story. Very well written and interesting. Great use of the required sentence. Touching story. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I did not spot any SPAG in your story. Very well written and interesting. Great use of the required sentence. Touching story. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thanks. Glad you liked it.
Comment from c_lucas
Every old building has it own history. The town of Bisbee, Az. Has an old hotel, still in use. The sounds of a saloon, partying and sights of apparitions are quite common. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Error
notice it last time I was her (here)
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Every old building has it own history. The town of Bisbee, Az. Has an old hotel, still in use. The sounds of a saloon, partying and sights of apparitions are quite common. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Error
notice it last time I was her (here)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thanks for finding the error. I will edit and correct.
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You're welcome, BlueBirds. Charlie
Comment from Ric Myworld
I, too, like to visit old houses, even old cemeteries, like the one who still have the giant vaults from hundreds of years ago. But, I must admit, if a door appeared that hadn't been there before, I would have been hauling butt out of there. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I, too, like to visit old houses, even old cemeteries, like the one who still have the giant vaults from hundreds of years ago. But, I must admit, if a door appeared that hadn't been there before, I would have been hauling butt out of there. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thanks for the review. I probably would have run too.
Comment from pbomar1115
Creating a story by using Door is some beautiful writing, especially if this was the genesis of the story. The mood creation as I followed the character as if a moving camera was capturing everything kept me captivated. All done without using the character's name. This a lesson I'm learning. Now, I must keep a reader attention in order to be effective as this author has, and I will be consider a fine writer. Nice.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Creating a story by using Door is some beautiful writing, especially if this was the genesis of the story. The mood creation as I followed the character as if a moving camera was capturing everything kept me captivated. All done without using the character's name. This a lesson I'm learning. Now, I must keep a reader attention in order to be effective as this author has, and I will be consider a fine writer. Nice.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thanks. Glad you liked the story
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You're welcome.
