Haiku (divide darkness)
Contest4 total reviews
Comment from AnnaLinda
playinaround,
This is a powerful haiku! Love the alliteration in your first line,
the imagery and energy in your second line...Fantastic satori too!
Very nice photo and presentation...(it might be nice to have your
font larger)
Just outstanding!
Linda
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016
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playinaround,
This is a powerful haiku! Love the alliteration in your first line,
the imagery and energy in your second line...Fantastic satori too!
Very nice photo and presentation...(it might be nice to have your
font larger)
Just outstanding!
Linda
Comment Written 07-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016
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Thank you Linda... So nice to get a review!! For some reason, the committee threw my poem out... I am so glad you liked it. Thank you for stopping by!!
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Sorry to hear that...do you know why? I just looked to see if I could find the contest and rules.
I had that happen on the art site....my red pointsettia was not red enough? You can guess I did not like that.
Comment from ericawrites
The contest rules state -short/long/short format
-two grammatically interconnected lines of concrete imagery (paints mental image)
-satori line or aha-moment (can be the first or last line)
your entry has long/short/long format, the first two lines are not grammatically interconnected and there is no satori line.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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The contest rules state -short/long/short format
-two grammatically interconnected lines of concrete imagery (paints mental image)
-satori line or aha-moment (can be the first or last line)
your entry has long/short/long format, the first two lines are not grammatically interconnected and there is no satori line.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for your input! I was tired this morning:) I have changed my poem. Will you please re-review, if you have the time... Thank you!
Comment from Joyce Long
I like this picture with your haiku. The horse does look like he has been excited. Very well done. Good luck on the contest. Lightening can light up the night like it is day, but it only stays for a few seconds. Your haiku seems tells the story of a thunder storm.
I couldn't see any way to improve your haiku.
Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 11-18-15
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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I like this picture with your haiku. The horse does look like he has been excited. Very well done. Good luck on the contest. Lightening can light up the night like it is day, but it only stays for a few seconds. Your haiku seems tells the story of a thunder storm.
I couldn't see any way to improve your haiku.
Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 11-18-15
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much Joyce!
Comment from Christof McTarnahan
Wow. You said so much with such few words. It is rare that I stumble upon a haiku of this caliber. Top notch poetry. If I had a six star left you would have it.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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Wow. You said so much with such few words. It is rare that I stumble upon a haiku of this caliber. Top notch poetry. If I had a six star left you would have it.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much Christof!