a tear
une larme3 total reviews
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Luna,
Much have I missed your bright lyrical words and puzzling intriguing metaphors.
I have longed to hear your beautiful poetic voice. In other words I look forward to much more of your excellent free verse poetry.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Hi, Luna,
Much have I missed your bright lyrical words and puzzling intriguing metaphors.
I have longed to hear your beautiful poetic voice. In other words I look forward to much more of your excellent free verse poetry.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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so nice to see you :)
and thank you for such a beautiful embrace!
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so nice to see you :)
and thank you for such a beautiful embrace!
Comment from LIJ Red
Not a bad free verse, although I am by no means a licensed inspector of poems.
I see a change that appeals to me "a torn appart heart" would be "a torn-apart heart". Excellent effort.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Not a bad free verse, although I am by no means a licensed inspector of poems.
I see a change that appeals to me "a torn appart heart" would be "a torn-apart heart". Excellent effort.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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thank you. no effort though, a humble compassion.
Comment from Glasstruth
This decribes man's pain that he created himself. Like how you've kept everything in uncapitalized letters. Especially effective: "small i am," creates a feeling of helplessness. Very nicely structured. Reads smoothly. Well crafted. Les
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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This decribes man's pain that he created himself. Like how you've kept everything in uncapitalized letters. Especially effective: "small i am," creates a feeling of helplessness. Very nicely structured. Reads smoothly. Well crafted. Les
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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small i am in front of pain of others. thank you.