cocaine and psychedelics
contest entry (see author notes)52 total reviews
Comment from Curly Girly
I read your poem with some interest. Foolish people do drugs. Why give power over you life to other people and the addiction? Sad. A waste of everything. It alters the brain forever.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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I read your poem with some interest. Foolish people do drugs. Why give power over you life to other people and the addiction? Sad. A waste of everything. It alters the brain forever.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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thank you for reading. you are so right. have a very merry Christmas :-))
Comment from seaglass
Having know people who fought this addiction I find your poem of metaphors accurate. All addictions are horrid in their own way but meth and coke quickly destroys mind, body and soul.
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Having know people who fought this addiction I find your poem of metaphors accurate. All addictions are horrid in their own way but meth and coke quickly destroys mind, body and soul.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
Comment from Unspoken94
I felt like I was on a drug high right along with this
individual. I don't know how anyone could write this
who didn't have some significant experience with it.
But this piece is incredible. It's the best piece I've read
today and that is many. What a seductive description
of a most satanic drug. -Bill
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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I felt like I was on a drug high right along with this
individual. I don't know how anyone could write this
who didn't have some significant experience with it.
But this piece is incredible. It's the best piece I've read
today and that is many. What a seductive description
of a most satanic drug. -Bill
Comment Written 10-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Wow Bill. What an encouraging review. i had fun writing the poem. however, you and I both know the subject is very deadly.
Comment from AKTuminello
Nice "view". "Eiderdown" is one word, though and you have two periods after consequences. I don't know if you meant it as an ellipses or as a period. The references are nice, but I wish I had not read your author's notes.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Nice "view". "Eiderdown" is one word, though and you have two periods after consequences. I don't know if you meant it as an ellipses or as a period. The references are nice, but I wish I had not read your author's notes.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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Thank you for reading the poem and helping me out. i did add a third period. i had to back space to get room and it throws the balance off slightly. however, i guess that's better than a confused ending to the sentence. I did not know eiderdown was one word. I've never looked it up or seen it on paper. there are many kinds of downs. thanks for the heads up. that is a critical error you helped me with. have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from nomi338
The only time I was tempted to try cocaine, I nervously waited to see how it affected the others in the room with me. As it turned out there must have been something else mixed in with it because each person lost consciousness after snorting some. I left that place and never returned. I do not even know what happened to those people as I deemed them too dangerous for me to be around. I believe that God's angels acted on my behalf that night, I have never since that time had any curiosity about illegal drugs. I was about 22 years old at that time. I am now 72.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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The only time I was tempted to try cocaine, I nervously waited to see how it affected the others in the room with me. As it turned out there must have been something else mixed in with it because each person lost consciousness after snorting some. I left that place and never returned. I do not even know what happened to those people as I deemed them too dangerous for me to be around. I believe that God's angels acted on my behalf that night, I have never since that time had any curiosity about illegal drugs. I was about 22 years old at that time. I am now 72.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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But for the grace of God there go I. so true with drugs. it starts out innocently and grabs hold and want let go. many a good person has fallen prey to drugs and alcohol. merry Christmas :-))
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Mystery author this captivates the altered mind well and races along with well chosen words and presentation. it portrays the highs and then lows of drug addiction so a good entry for the contest good luck with this one Cheers Christineð???
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Hi Mystery author this captivates the altered mind well and races along with well chosen words and presentation. it portrays the highs and then lows of drug addiction so a good entry for the contest good luck with this one Cheers Christineð???
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
Comment from JanPerry
Wonderful wording and very succinct. I always wondered the effects of certain drugs and would never experiment due to my boredom and would be addicted in no time.
Just as well. I really like the colour yellow on black. I think I will use it.
Hope you win this contest, this is a winning poem.
Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Wonderful wording and very succinct. I always wondered the effects of certain drugs and would never experiment due to my boredom and would be addicted in no time.
Just as well. I really like the colour yellow on black. I think I will use it.
Hope you win this contest, this is a winning poem.
Well done.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Excellent entry for the contest. Superb display which must have taken hours - all that colour change, it is almost like your signature. No name but it gives us a good hint about the writer. I wish you well in the content. The only colour I had difficulty with was 'azure' - that colour on black does not show up. I sussed it out of course. Well done. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Excellent entry for the contest. Superb display which must have taken hours - all that colour change, it is almost like your signature. No name but it gives us a good hint about the writer. I wish you well in the content. The only colour I had difficulty with was 'azure' - that colour on black does not show up. I sussed it out of course. Well done. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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thank you so much for taking the time to read the poem. I appreciate the kind review. I changed the color of my blue a bit and it is much easier to see. thanks for pointing that out. have a merry Christmas :-))
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem shows the danger of drug addiction and how circular it is. It is sad that someone could be so sad in life to need any drug so much.
I like the white words that are the ones used to descibe cocaine itself, which of course, white. I like the use of rainbow words to show the effects of the drug.
The black background is the darkness of addiction.
I really didn't need the notes to know what the white words were.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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This poem shows the danger of drug addiction and how circular it is. It is sad that someone could be so sad in life to need any drug so much.
I like the white words that are the ones used to descibe cocaine itself, which of course, white. I like the use of rainbow words to show the effects of the drug.
The black background is the darkness of addiction.
I really didn't need the notes to know what the white words were.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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thank you for the kind review. i placed some notes because I get the impression that many on Fanstory are not the type to fall into addiction and know little of the substance. unfortunately i do but am well past it now. have a merry Christmas :-))
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You're welcome. Glad to here you are past it.
Merry Christmas.
dragonpoet
Comment from Jacob Collins
I liked the way how you presented your piece with the different colours which reflected well the effects cocaine can have on a person's mind. Your use of description was very well done, you clearly showed the horrors it can cause. A nicely written piece, good luck in the contest...Jacob
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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I liked the way how you presented your piece with the different colours which reflected well the effects cocaine can have on a person's mind. Your use of description was very well done, you clearly showed the horrors it can cause. A nicely written piece, good luck in the contest...Jacob
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review the poem. the poem was fun to write but the subject is deadly serious. have a merry Christmas and a good night :-))
