Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Personal Pizzas"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
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Comment from Sambangi
This is an excellent rewrite. Good rhythm, will be more pleasant if it is sung rather than read. Very well done. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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This is an excellent rewrite. Good rhythm, will be more pleasant if it is sung rather than read. Very well done. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 11-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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Thanks, Sambangi.
Comment from barkingdog
Your lyric re-write really fits the melody to this song.
I love what you did with this part of the chorus:
'I will deliver
Throw out last night's liver.'
I laughed out loud.
Good luck in the contest.
:) e
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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Your lyric re-write really fits the melody to this song.
I love what you did with this part of the chorus:
'I will deliver
Throw out last night's liver.'
I laughed out loud.
Good luck in the contest.
:) e
Comment Written 11-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2015
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Thanks, barkingdog. Isn't this the most fun contest ever? I always hear lyrics differently in my head. It was nice to get a chance to put them down in writing.
