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Dawn of Chaos

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Comment from c_lucas
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A teller of tales need not be truthful, just entertaining. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
    Thanking you for generous rate and touching sentiments.
Comment from Janet Foor
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Excellent picture that compliments your poem. A thought provoking piece. Interesting, vivid imagery and descriptive language.

Well done

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
    The pictures does make its statement, others also captured by him. Glad write was somewhat pleasung. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Eternal Muse
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An interesting tale about Simon - he is an interesting personage for sure, and in him I see the metaphor for us, writers. Great visuals and excellent character description.

Thank you for sharing it with us.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
    Glad this write touched and seems meaning.I originally felt expressed more appropriate. I thank FS. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating statement.
Comment from patcelaw
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I have a brother that is very much like Simon, he can relate a story in such a way that we never know when he is telling the truth or is lying. As a little boy, his nickname was fibber.
A name that still fits him as a 75 year old man.
One fun thing about being writers is we can spin our fiction and people love it.
Patricia

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
    So true, storytellers has held history and lies about our living existence: I assume why we have books. Thanking you for generous rate and touching sentiments.
Comment from Liberty Justice
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Five stars. Amazing story about Simon. He is very interesting chap. Love way delights people with his tales of survivals struggles through life. Well done! liberty justice

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
    Glad aspects of this write found appeal, hopefully lessen pits makes this write strong and pleasurable to its reader. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
reply by Liberty Justice on 24-Jul-2016
    Hi! Whose publishing your
    book and poetry etc.? How
    can I get more buyers for
    my poetry book that's selling
    so slowly?
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
    Things I must consider.
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Very nice artwork for your poem about Simon.
-I agree with some of the fellow reviewers and say that this poem has a deep meaning for you.
-Therefore, saying anything about grammar would not be relevant.
-What is important is what comes from your heart, and that is what this poem does.
-It is an emotional piece about all of these experiences that Simon must have had or seen, and now puts them in his stories to share with others.
-As you say, "Events told by Simon are about life..."
-Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
    I hear your statements, I want to go down trying to improve my grammar: wonder can you teach a old dog a new trick. I taught my grandfather at 80 to write coherent statements: lost myself. Thanking you for generous rate and all said.
reply by Pam (respa) on 25-Jul-2016
    I will send you a message in the near future. Amazing that you taught your grandfather; that is an accomplishment. You are very welcome for the stars and comments.
Comment from Dean Kuch
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I concentrated more on the flow of this intriguing write, TPAC, and not so much on the grammatical aspects. I sense this poem has a very deep meaning for you and I did detect a sort of rhythm and flow as I read further along. I also noticed a definite pattern beginning to evolve, so I offer you no suggestions for grammatical "fixes".
It is a very compelling and interesting write, to say the very least.
Nicely done, sir.
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 Comment Written 23-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
    Pits are my problems, yet revisions are clearly harsh spots giving the write better appeal. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating conveyances.
reply by Dean Kuch on 23-Jul-2016
    The pleasure was all mine, my friend.
    ~Dean
Comment from harmony13
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are interesting, descriptive and thought
provoking. The reader pondered on the words of this poem. Thank you for
the author's notes - food for thought. The artwork is perfect and compliments the
theme of this poem.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
    I love the artwork offered in the gallery, trully some captiving designs. Glad certain aspects of these writes pleased. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from RoostyNester
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Simon sounds like a real character out of the old days! I like the artwork you chose for the base of your poem. Nice structure of poem and words chosen.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
    Glad this write delighted senses, I thank you for your generous rate and encouraging inspirational words.
Comment from RGstar
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Somehow trying to go with the flow of the write without delving into grammar, for I have a feeling this write has a special format or emotion embedded into the write or I would have proposed some grammar changes. I saw a pattern and I hope I am right, for it gives much room to thought.
My best to you, my friend.
have a great day.
RGstar

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2016


reply by the author on 24-Jul-2016
    No pits. Yet feeling but need to be grammatically correct: still more to learn -cool. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.