2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "5/7/5 (tuelf out of ten kids)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from OnyxSapphire78
That is freaking hilarious! Good job on this! Great entry for the contest. Good luck on your creative endeavors. Happy writing!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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That is freaking hilarious! Good job on this! Great entry for the contest. Good luck on your creative endeavors. Happy writing!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much Onyx :)
Comment from twinklepoems
Sadly, more and more true. I cringe when I see flyers or newsletters released to parents or the press. Your spelling is better than theirs. I would see this as more of a Senryu and comment on education. Best of luck!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Sadly, more and more true. I cringe when I see flyers or newsletters released to parents or the press. Your spelling is better than theirs. I would see this as more of a Senryu and comment on education. Best of luck!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you twinklepoems :)
Comment from NJK62
I liked the inventiveness of this poem. It is a successful joke, although I'm not sure it accords with the sentiment expressed in your notes! There is a highly effective alignment of the content and style with the jokey intent of the poem that makes it work. Well done! This deserves to do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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I liked the inventiveness of this poem. It is a successful joke, although I'm not sure it accords with the sentiment expressed in your notes! There is a highly effective alignment of the content and style with the jokey intent of the poem that makes it work. Well done! This deserves to do well in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you NJK I appreciate your review :)
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A pleasure.
Comment from LeslieP5
Ha - funny one. You did a great job of satirical humor in this 5-7-5 poem. I can only hope all the tichers are not like this or our kids are in trouble! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Ha - funny one. You did a great job of satirical humor in this 5-7-5 poem. I can only hope all the tichers are not like this or our kids are in trouble! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you Leslie, no teachers are not like that, this is just a joke. Thank you for the review.
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I know - I was just joking also.
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Yes, I know :)
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is the truth here, that many kids can no longer spell very well. Teachers are doing all they can, but have much to compete with. Clever 5-7-5. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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This is the truth here, that many kids can no longer spell very well. Teachers are doing all they can, but have much to compete with. Clever 5-7-5. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Thank you Jeanie :)
Comment from Beejay
So clever, it was fascinating to read, almost teasing my mind,whilst reading it.
It was subtle and brilliant. Good luck to you.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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So clever, it was fascinating to read, almost teasing my mind,whilst reading it.
It was subtle and brilliant. Good luck to you.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much Beejay :)
Comment from Jackarrie
A great play on words in this humorous poem,
it can be difficult learning Ingleish, readen riting ritimitc too
Good luck in the contest.
Mary
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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A great play on words in this humorous poem,
it can be difficult learning Ingleish, readen riting ritimitc too
Good luck in the contest.
Mary
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Thank you Mary :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
No offense taken. I enjoyed your humorous 5/7/5. Good job on the format--the correct syllables.
I see no changes. Thanks for the notes.
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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No offense taken. I enjoyed your humorous 5/7/5. Good job on the format--the correct syllables.
I see no changes. Thanks for the notes.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Thank you Janny :)
Comment from Tessa Kay
This one made me smile. Unfortunately, it can be closer to the truth than is comfortable. Very well done.
All the best in the contest. :)
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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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This one made me smile. Unfortunately, it can be closer to the truth than is comfortable. Very well done.
All the best in the contest. :)
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Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Thank you Tessa :)
Comment from JourneyHolm
Well done! I too am a teacher. Fortunately I teach a group of students who have an excellent capacity to read, write, and "math". I truly enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Well done! I too am a teacher. Fortunately I teach a group of students who have an excellent capacity to read, write, and "math". I truly enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Thank you Journey :)