Synergy
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Comment from Joan E.
I could "feel your emotions flying free" and liked the hyphenated words giving two potential ways to read them. It was as if you were defining "Synergy" and the rhymes added to the intensity of the message. Best wishes in the Free Verse contest- Joan
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I could "feel your emotions flying free" and liked the hyphenated words giving two potential ways to read them. It was as if you were defining "Synergy" and the rhymes added to the intensity of the message. Best wishes in the Free Verse contest- Joan
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
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Thnaks very much Joan for getting the message. Have a great Monday. Hugs.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Interesting free verse and interesting read. If we writers wrote to pay the rent, many of us would be out on the street. But happily that is not why we write. Your poem is well written in an intelligent way.'Hearts unite as one' - sounds like synergy to me LOL - good read. Thank you for posting - Warm regards Dorothy x
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Interesting free verse and interesting read. If we writers wrote to pay the rent, many of us would be out on the street. But happily that is not why we write. Your poem is well written in an intelligent way.'Hearts unite as one' - sounds like synergy to me LOL - good read. Thank you for posting - Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
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Thanks Dorothy - That is true. One old high school friend's husband, when I told them I was a poet, immediately said "You can't make any money with poetry" Needless to say, I was glad I was not married to him!!
Comment from TAB_that's me
Awesome free verse Leslie. It says so many different things and I read it through twice to pick up even more meaning. Your format looks great!
teresa
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Awesome free verse Leslie. It says so many different things and I read it through twice to pick up even more meaning. Your format looks great!
teresa
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Teresa for the great review and 6 stars. I really appreciate the feedback and that you found it interesting enough to read two times. It means allot because I respect you as a poet.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image to go with your poem.
-I like your poem very much.
-Good style, content, flow, and creativity.
-Very good play on words, as "Can you feel my poe-try?"
-I also like "No stars ***** to rate"
-The conclusion is very effective and makes a good point.
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-A good image to go with your poem.
-I like your poem very much.
-Good style, content, flow, and creativity.
-Very good play on words, as "Can you feel my poe-try?"
-I also like "No stars ***** to rate"
-The conclusion is very effective and makes a good point.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
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Thank yiu respa1 for your excellent review. I'm glad you liked it.
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You are very welcome.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, leslie, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the poetry that flows and shouldn't be regarded with discontentment but of pride in the poet's achievement. I enjoyed reading it.
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this is an excellent write, leslie, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the poetry that flows and shouldn't be regarded with discontentment but of pride in the poet's achievement. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
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Thanks sweetwoodjax. I was just thinking of adding the Jim Morrison video Light my Fire, since it goes with a part of this verse. But it might also detract from the poem because the two people depicted are already in a synergistic relationship. I think it would be entertaining and I could take it down before the contest comes up. What do you think? I'm going to try to add in a few minutes to see if I like it.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
A well done poem, it synergises all the thrills and frills of writers and readers on this site. Lots of fun in this, I specially like this verse
"Your words don't pay the rent,
But Heaven sent.
Instant gratification.
Soul's edification.
Elation."
ola thomas
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A well done poem, it synergises all the thrills and frills of writers and readers on this site. Lots of fun in this, I specially like this verse
"Your words don't pay the rent,
But Heaven sent.
Instant gratification.
Soul's edification.
Elation."
ola thomas
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Ola for the excellent review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Should have a warning for language. Good use of how words can be manipulated into meaning whatever the writer wants them to and illicit different connotations. Should also be a good contest entry.
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Should have a warning for language. Good use of how words can be manipulated into meaning whatever the writer wants them to and illicit different connotations. Should also be a good contest entry.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
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Thanks. Oh, o.k. I thought it was not that strong language - thought that was for sexual language mostly. I will add it.
Comment from Nosha17
I don't normally like free verse for two reasons, no rhyming and it doesn't make sense most of the time. Yours made complete sense, your rhyming was effective in stressing the point. Well expressed thoughts of the understanding in a synergistic relationship. One thing, verse 7, it should read passions flare-a verb, flair is the noun, meaning something a little different. Good luck in the contest faye
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I don't normally like free verse for two reasons, no rhyming and it doesn't make sense most of the time. Yours made complete sense, your rhyming was effective in stressing the point. Well expressed thoughts of the understanding in a synergistic relationship. One thing, verse 7, it should read passions flare-a verb, flair is the noun, meaning something a little different. Good luck in the contest faye
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
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Thanks, you to the rescue again. I am terrible with grammar, spelling especially. I will make the change no- thanks for telling me - I appreciate it!!
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That was I'll make the change now (not "no"). I do know the difference in meaning of the two, just sometimes when I write, the first thing in spelling that comes to my mind is what I use. I've got to slow down - Imake too many little errors like this and typos.
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That was I'll make the change now (not "no"). I do know the difference in meaning of the two, just sometimes when I write, the first thing in spelling that comes to my mind is what I use. I've got to slow down - Imake too many little errors like this and typos.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
A very solid free verse. It is strong in its verse as it is its message. The layout of this poem is creatively done with a picture to enhance the write and its feel. Perhaps put a spacing between the heading Synergy and the start of the poem. However, if that is the start of the poem then perhaps bold font the last word Synergy. Just a suggestion. Well done and good luck.
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A very solid free verse. It is strong in its verse as it is its message. The layout of this poem is creatively done with a picture to enhance the write and its feel. Perhaps put a spacing between the heading Synergy and the start of the poem. However, if that is the start of the poem then perhaps bold font the last word Synergy. Just a suggestion. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Thanks PoemsofDD for your review and feedback. I thought of putting a space - it is the title but also I wanted it connected to the poem. As you thought, I had tried making the last Synergy bold but it didn't look right.
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That's good. At least you were able to try and play around with it. Perhaps italic the word so they are similar to a point in appearance. I'm sure if left alone it is equally as good. Good job either way. DD🌸
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a fun poem about "poe-try." What stood out was your love of language and words. Your poem is playful and runs through many popular metaphors like "fan the flame" and "words don't pay the rent." Your poem radiates an energy that is kinetic. This would make a great spoken word poem. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
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This is a fun poem about "poe-try." What stood out was your love of language and words. Your poem is playful and runs through many popular metaphors like "fan the flame" and "words don't pay the rent." Your poem radiates an energy that is kinetic. This would make a great spoken word poem. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
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Thanks, SIis Cat for the great review. I think it would make a good presentation poem also. Unfortunately, I'm not a presentation poet - have never done it. I am a visual poet - put some of my poems on coordinating theme papers, print and frame. I'd loveto have someone else perform some of my poems. But maybe there will be a first time.
