Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

VEry funny. The Kyrielle rhyme and rhythm here are perfect.I love the analogies you make in each stanza (especially the 'skunk' reference)I really got a big laugh out of the humor portrayed here. Great Job!

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015

Thank you so much. I started to write something lovely and touching. Hahaha. I just needed to get this out of my system. I'm so delighted you enjoyed it. It was fun to write, or well, fun for my dear Uncle Shamus to write. :)) mikey

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the author notes. I do not notice if it had meter. You do have to be careful of what looks like sweet cream. Especially of it is in the form of a supposedly lovely lady. Great work. It was funny.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2015

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

There goes that Irish leprechaun, curdling the cream again! After a few pints of the liquid blonde in a black silk dress, the fair sex seems to become fairer. A drop or two of Jamieson on top of it can seal one's fate!

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2015

Comment from lightink

Excellent

Gosh, Michael, this should put this poem either on beer bottles (it would be more effective than the any other warning), or on condoms (people would never go out without them). You sure take your part in teaching the youth what they are up to! Those images! Those haunting images! But I am sure that's what you were going for! :)

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2015

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

You are too funny, I don't mind Halloween poems with humour. I am scared to have sweet cream now in case it turns to goodness knows what! Excellent rhyming and imagery. The picture is fun, too. Good luck in the contest. faye

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2015

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Well...I see we both have entered another contest at the same time. Your entry -- I admit that I haven't seen any others besides mine -- will pose me some difficulty I fear. Meter? No matter! What can I say? I love your work -- it is compelling, and I like that you break the "rules" when you obviously have all the skills to obey them, and beyond.
-Carol

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2015

Comment from Green Lake Girl

Excellent

I had to read this poem twice to get the full meaning. Since I'm not a "man's man" it took me awhile. LOL

Nothing like beer goggles, eh? The lovely lass curdled in the morning hours. Does Shameless Shamus take over your keyboard very often? LOL Well done, Mikey.

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2015

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Holy morning after poem. Not only the victim of beer goggles, but now that ghastly, crusted funk. Sweet cream cuddles without warning- I don't even want to think about that line, just spit out my coffee, in fact. Change the sheets! A very ripe sonnet.

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2015

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is a a delightful Kyrielle and got me to laugh out loud. I found it delightful, tastefully tacky, and such fun to read. Love your nephew's sense of humor. This is a marvelous entry for this contest and I wish you all the best.

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2015

Comment from Linda Engel

Excellent

OK Mike, pour me a glass of Scotch and let's talk about this. I read it several times and I must say it is funny. The picture fits right in. She would have been a lady of the evening in her time.
Be careful in your drunken state, cream tastes sweeter, make no mistake
But once you're sober by late afternoon, the aroma takes over and will make you swoon.
Mixing fruit juice with Whiskey? no, no, no, no, ........

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2015