Reflections Of Color
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Comment from Sis Cat
Effective poem that sounded like the lyrics of a country western song, as you stated in your notes. I loved how you played with the phrase "hold on." This serves as the dying heartbeat in your poem of loss.
One suggestion. "love between us has grown old" sounds smoother than "gotten old."
Thank you for sharing your lyrical poem I can hear in my heart and in my head.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Effective poem that sounded like the lyrics of a country western song, as you stated in your notes. I loved how you played with the phrase "hold on." This serves as the dying heartbeat in your poem of loss.
One suggestion. "love between us has grown old" sounds smoother than "gotten old."
Thank you for sharing your lyrical poem I can hear in my heart and in my head.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
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Comment from Eric1
Hi Brett, I like these well written lyrics, they tell as story as all good lyrics should. The repeat of the first stanza holds it all together beautifully.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Hi Brett, I like these well written lyrics, they tell as story as all good lyrics should. The repeat of the first stanza holds it all together beautifully.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
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Comment from scd41
When both the partners know that their romantic relationship is short-lived, there is no point in holding on just for the sake of it. Love can last long even when the tie is snapped but mere romantic feeling surging because of expediency would subside sooner than later. As you say, it would be prudent to give up in such cases.
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When both the partners know that their romantic relationship is short-lived, there is no point in holding on just for the sake of it. Love can last long even when the tie is snapped but mere romantic feeling surging because of expediency would subside sooner than later. As you say, it would be prudent to give up in such cases.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
It is always easier to give up than to hold on and carry on. Find something else to hold on after losing everything is not easy, but a person must find a reason to carry on.
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It is always easier to give up than to hold on and carry on. Find something else to hold on after losing everything is not easy, but a person must find a reason to carry on.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
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Comment from barkingdog
We can all relate to this song, Brett. A love is gone, we get lonely. One night stands can't substitute for the real thing, no matter how much we want them to.
Givin' up is the easy thing to do when there's nothin' left to hold on to.
Sad but true. Powerful emotional poem/song. Bravo.
:)e
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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We can all relate to this song, Brett. A love is gone, we get lonely. One night stands can't substitute for the real thing, no matter how much we want them to.
Givin' up is the easy thing to do when there's nothin' left to hold on to.
Sad but true. Powerful emotional poem/song. Bravo.
:)e
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
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Comment from Unspoken94
As I was reading this I thought, "This could be a good song." And then you spoke of them as lyrics. I hope you can get it done. I also value the free-verse as I do only that. This is really a haunting poem for me and I think it reminds me of my own journey with relationships. But your work here is excellent. -Bill
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As I was reading this I thought, "This could be a good song." And then you spoke of them as lyrics. I hope you can get it done. I also value the free-verse as I do only that. This is really a haunting poem for me and I think it reminds me of my own journey with relationships. But your work here is excellent. -Bill
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2015
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