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A Collection Of Short Form Poetry

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Comment from Realist101
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HA! Love this clever and fun poem Michael! What an imagination you have! I love all birds, and these two species can't be more different, but each special in their own ways! Nice work and best of luck in the contest! Suse

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2015

Comment from ann marie mazz
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good morning


this entry is brilliant
I enjoyed the message
your words are fabulous
the format is true to form
all is well in the creation and execution
the presentation is lovely

in short
well done in all areas
my money is on the penguin with his response

thank you for sharing your talent
enjoy the morning and day
ann marie

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2015

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello :)

Nice 5/7/5 poem entry for the bye bye blackbird contest. Good syllable count which is very important for this type of contest. Good job!
gypsy

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2015

Comment from mvbrooks
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Interesting use of title to "sneak in" another line--not sure how that will play with the contest rules, but without the title/fourth line the poem seems incomplete. That's why the rating of 4 -- because it seems incomplete without that "fourth" line.

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 Comment Written 05-Oct-2015

Comment from Brett Matthew West
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Penguins smart enough to participate from a distance. Well written poem with a nifty little message. Should also be a good contest entry.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2015

Comment from Jeanie Mercer
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This is an interesting personification of the eagle gloating over the penguins self-righteously about his partaking and the penguins only observing. Nicely illustrated. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015

Comment from Benjamin Valencia
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Hello, A cute part of a dialogue where it might be too cold for an Eagle to roam. The Penguins will participate from a distance. Good luck and cheers.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015

Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
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This is very clever. I was confused at first as to how the 5-7-5 worked with this, but then I realized that the poem only began with the penguins' reply, and that the Eagle's taunt was, in fact, the title.

I predict a contest win with this one! It's awesome.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015

Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, the eagle mocking the penguin and the penguins answering back smartly, love the picture. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015

Comment from nordicgirl
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Quite thought provoking. Of course, it is the eagle`s existence most would envy. One might consider the penguin shortchanged even.
But there are aspects of penguin life the eagle cannot expetiene, deep sea diving, a group interaction etc. This is surely the winner. Can`t ask for much more considering the restrictions.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015