Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Your haiku is perfect! It honors a season, uses an energetic verb and ends with a neat observation--ah ha. The golden background adds to the intensity. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks Joan:)

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is a well done haiku with intriguing concrete imagery. It follows the criteria of the prompt. Good luck to you in the contest, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015

thank you Jeanie:)

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-You have followed the directions given in the prompt.
-Good connection between lines one and two.
-Good imagery in line two with "autumn sun".
-Good satori line. There is definitely a lot of pollen!
-This is probably a stretch, but I was trying to think what sounded like the last line, especially "in the wind" and then I thought of "Blowin' in the Wind" and pollen definitely does that!

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015

thank you:)

reply by Pam (respa) on 27-Sep-2015

You are welcome.