Comment from Joyce Long

Good

I was left with many mixed feelings after reading your poem. Organ donating can save lives, but I view it as bittersweet.
This poem is filled with deep emotions and sometimes is difficult to follow.
I'm sorry for your lose, but how wonderful that he has helped others.
Thank you for sharing.
Joyce 9-22-15

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

Thank you for your review.
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Comment from OLA THOMAS

Excellent

Difficult to review but easy to empathise with the family for the lost of long gone days. Your form of this poem is so distinct and rare. Very creative and enchanting.
Your author's notes is very informative too.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

Thanks Ola, I love the Enchanting remark.
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Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This was a very sad but very happy poem too. Knowing one day you will see your precious son again. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I am sorry for your loss. God Bless You. hugs, Teri

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

Thank you and a very kind review for as broken man.
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Comment from MaBaker

Good

It took me three goes to understand this poem but I don't think that is correct. It appears about be centred in a donor retrieval hospital though earlier on it had Correctional Centre line as address but, all the way through it read of the need for organs. I sincerely hope I have gotten that correctly. It is a very moving piece and it set me back reading it. Thank you for sharing this with me. Ma Baker

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015

"First, 'The Facility' was a county jail and that was where I wrote this and secondly It is not about retrievals from the hospitals but those whom received my dead son Jay's organs."
"This beautiful story warrants a correction and a six if not a blue ribbon.."
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