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Act of Endurance

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Dawn of Chaos

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Comment from foxangie123
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This is great I believe because it reads the purpose and need to fight. That good defeating the evil killing machine that we were warned of long before right now. It shows courage and faith.

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2015


reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
    It might illustrate an idiot at heart, I like your statements. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts.
reply by foxangie123 on 29-Dec-2015
    Great Work..
Comment from Bluebird77
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Great poem. The author expresses all the ways in which an individual can be.
If that individual were to become this person, the author implies as to how he
would express himself or what he will do to help make the world a better place.
Also indicating different aspects of life. Different titles for individuals and each verse exemplifies what each role model would do to make the world a better place.

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2015


reply by the author on 29-Dec-2015
    This write does contain those intended interests for ones aims. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from pbomar1115
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This person ponders saving the wold by transforming into anything that is good.He makes it his choice. Be it animal, spirit, or whatever he pleases. Also, he would be endowed with wisdom. He would save the world from hunger. This is the savers if he wanted. These are aims that are good.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
    Or a mad dog especially spoken in hell. Glad this write was appealing holding an interests hopefully inspiring to you: thanking you for generous rate and touching statements disclosing this work.
reply by pbomar1115 on 01-Dec-2015
    You're welcome.
Comment from kittykatnoel
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I am unfamiliar with this form of poetry. It doesn't make any sense. Is it a special way of writing? You have presented some interesting points, though I am not sure how to connect them. Thank you for writing.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
    I have questioned whether it is poetry, certainly feelings expressed about life, something to stir hell's pot: thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
Comment from robina1978
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Excellent picture that complements your poem perfectly. I did not know which form you used, but you certainly covered a lot of ground: from animals, fighting enemies and playing notes for freedom.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2015
    That's why I'm here to learn. I came to find out if I was a poet: or whether these statements I held were nothing but notes. Glad you found interests in this work. Thanking you for generous rate and charming conveyances.
Comment from chocoletdrop052
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Great mediation of creation. The state of existing as one is intrusive and intriguing for the mind set on the vehicle of sight and sound. One would say could I, should I or will I. What truly summons thoughts and most of all emotions. The wonders portion is will I, and this makes a person strive to accomplish what is know as should I? Thanks you and your pen.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2015


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2015
    Indeed well spoken. I think I fainted during the actual battle fought need to find out whom between sides within won. Thanking you for heart treasured statements plus extra generous rate and inspiring thoughts.
Comment from Word Doctor Carson Volk
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Interesting piece. Vivid use of words, and a fresh concept. The format is...unique. I'm not sure if this was intentional, due to the different format style, but I did notice a few small, easy-to-make errors like in the sentence: "...what out of all shall I try in whole world, to be?"-Missing the word "the." Though, as I mentioned, this may have been intentional to match the flow of the piece.
All in all, a thought-provoking piece that would be quite enjoyable if polished a bit. Not bad, but not exceptionally great. Thanks for sharing! Have a good day :)

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2015
    I will take to heart your statements but pleased all was not viewed bad. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed insights about this write.
Comment from Zue65
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The poem has a very strong social message and there are lot of insights and nuggets of wisdom infused in this poem. The form is quite different because the lines are quite long but I enjoyed reading this one too. All the best.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2015
    Thanking you for generous rate and charming thoughts about this write.
Comment from Wabigoon
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tpac--
There's a certain sense to your way of speaking that makes some sense after reading a while. I am not quite clear on why be you so not quite clear but that's and you them, green field for all to eat. Yes, thing to be, or not to be, that is the question, the demand and the dilemma. Brave and not so brave. I am surprised you verify the word enemy in this field?

I can see there's a certain method to your "madness" here and that helps.

Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2015
    I see this write excited a little aspect within you good. Thanking you for generous rate and thoughtful conveyances about this write.
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello TPAC
Look at all the interesting choices to pick to feel special all done in un-rhyming couplets .

Good entry to be read.

Gert


 Comment Written 26-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
    Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed insights about this write. Glad you found some appeal.
reply by Gert sherwood on 26-Oct-2015
    You are welcome TPAC
    I found your thoughts all appealing especially this one-

    Faith in trusts to give, helper to breed hope.
    A voice to speak blessed things clever.

    Gert