Act of Endurance
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Comment from Jeffrey Ford
I think you wrote a great and deep self improvement poem. It made me really think. A Speaker's view tells of "Jesus' shadows, as arrows hit notes, God His shouts about harm, evilness palaces, and the hollows pain to him." I thought quote was really deep. Great poem!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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I think you wrote a great and deep self improvement poem. It made me really think. A Speaker's view tells of "Jesus' shadows, as arrows hit notes, God His shouts about harm, evilness palaces, and the hollows pain to him." I thought quote was really deep. Great poem!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Glad aspects in this particular write were appealing to your interests, thanking you for your generous rate and touching comments.
Comment from Eve Vasa
Hello TPAC, you have a unique way of writing. I've never seen it before, and I think I could pick a poem of yours out of a hundred.
It feels like you are giving us little pearls of wisdom, one after the other, quick images that leave you contemplating the meaning.
This is an example of one that spoke to me:
'declare from his mind treasures aiding others'
I really liked that, and I think we need to discern between what is treasure and what is dust that will blow away in the breeze.
Loved the pic, very contemplative, which suits the work. I have no suggestions for improvement, and thanks for sharing your writing with me at FS today, cheers, Eve.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Hello TPAC, you have a unique way of writing. I've never seen it before, and I think I could pick a poem of yours out of a hundred.
It feels like you are giving us little pearls of wisdom, one after the other, quick images that leave you contemplating the meaning.
This is an example of one that spoke to me:
'declare from his mind treasures aiding others'
I really liked that, and I think we need to discern between what is treasure and what is dust that will blow away in the breeze.
Loved the pic, very contemplative, which suits the work. I have no suggestions for improvement, and thanks for sharing your writing with me at FS today, cheers, Eve.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Loving your response, yielding a different perspective of these writes I've done, liking your viewpoint over the others presented about my work. Thanking you for this enlightening view, and generous rate.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
While learning and practice living, sensing and manifesting righteousness in courses of living, helping others, combating evilness, promotes and causes the existence of being; well said, well done.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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While learning and practice living, sensing and manifesting righteousness in courses of living, helping others, combating evilness, promotes and causes the existence of being; well said, well done.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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Glad certain aspects in this write were found appealing to your interests, thanking you for your generous rate and slamming comments.
Comment from frierajac
The picture and the poem together remind me of a famous line by Stevie Smith
All my life I was out there, drowning not waving. and at the last bit it looks like a political poem in a vision.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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The picture and the poem together remind me of a famous line by Stevie Smith
All my life I was out there, drowning not waving. and at the last bit it looks like a political poem in a vision.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Interesting statement seems like its presented views didn't hold your complete acceptance. I thank you for generous rate and worthy thoughts.
Comment from Badger_29
Well written, I am starting to get the hang of this style. Some powerful images and metaphors, with a nice summation at the end, liberties. Darren
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Well written, I am starting to get the hang of this style. Some powerful images and metaphors, with a nice summation at the end, liberties. Darren
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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At least I found something I can state as written, your words give me hopes of better revisions. Thanking you for generous rate and honest comment.
Comment from TallySally
This poem has parts that strike me as truly inspired.
The first verse is one: first sentence - so often we imagine ourselves doing something noble or courageous, but the 'actual' doing is not always attempted; the turtle stopping and me popping out is inspired.
The fifth verse is another: I have the sole choice in my being.
I love the phrase, 'me to wipe tears with truth.'
The verse with 'I to be a lighthouse on an island,' is breath-taking and haunting simultaneously.
The 'Sightless shadows ..' verse is gripping, challenging, and full purpose. Scarey too.
Awed over the 'I and the host of the world' and 'fully armed to defeat a wild killing machine."
I admit there are parts I don't understand - but it's like having pearls of wisdom beyond current reach. Words for deep consideration.
This is a challenging work.
Really good.
God bless and my best,
Relda
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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This poem has parts that strike me as truly inspired.
The first verse is one: first sentence - so often we imagine ourselves doing something noble or courageous, but the 'actual' doing is not always attempted; the turtle stopping and me popping out is inspired.
The fifth verse is another: I have the sole choice in my being.
I love the phrase, 'me to wipe tears with truth.'
The verse with 'I to be a lighthouse on an island,' is breath-taking and haunting simultaneously.
The 'Sightless shadows ..' verse is gripping, challenging, and full purpose. Scarey too.
Awed over the 'I and the host of the world' and 'fully armed to defeat a wild killing machine."
I admit there are parts I don't understand - but it's like having pearls of wisdom beyond current reach. Words for deep consideration.
This is a challenging work.
Really good.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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My flaw as a writer is proper expression of my thoughts. Yet even with this lack my intents seem to shine forth. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
Comment from Veenbee
I like that you start out with wanting to do good. Then you take yourself through all these forms, and show from their point of view what you would do. I like where you say you have the sole choice.
You have beliefs held to die self chosen, my chose birth... do you mean, my choice or I choose birth?
I like the part...sightless shadows which hate can not hurt me.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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I like that you start out with wanting to do good. Then you take yourself through all these forms, and show from their point of view what you would do. I like where you say you have the sole choice.
You have beliefs held to die self chosen, my chose birth... do you mean, my choice or I choose birth?
I like the part...sightless shadows which hate can not hurt me.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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The thought was choice. Pits. My writes have them. Glad you saw beyond these flaws. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts about this work.
Comment from thonnigford09
I love this!! Stream of conscious!!! very good. It flows well and I would recommend it. I love the imagery and this is self improvement. Thanks. thonnigford09
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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I love this!! Stream of conscious!!! very good. It flows well and I would recommend it. I love the imagery and this is self improvement. Thanks. thonnigford09
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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Very rare I receive such a rewarding, I will still look for pits in this write. Thanking you for generous rate and over pleasing comments of enjoyment expressed.
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Thanks!!!! No Problem.
Comment from His Grayness
Thanks for sharing this wonderous "epexegesis" and mindblast of "maybeees in imagination! It was a real trip and I celebrate your colorful imagination! Many thanks..HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016
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Thanks for sharing this wonderous "epexegesis" and mindblast of "maybeees in imagination! It was a real trip and I celebrate your colorful imagination! Many thanks..HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment Written 09-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016
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Glad this work found interest with you still I fear suffers pits in its presentation. Thanking you for generous rate and inspiring comments.
Comment from ladyinwating
Snippet, snippet, snippet... Ok sorry but your ramblings are just that rambbbbblllllinnnngggs. Your writing style is just covering your weak ideas in quagmire. Extricate those ideas and start discovering what you actually what to do. If you were trying to bore us and pull us along endless spaghetti loops of your dialog going nowhere, then kudos to your success.
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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016
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Snippet, snippet, snippet... Ok sorry but your ramblings are just that rambbbbblllllinnnngggs. Your writing style is just covering your weak ideas in quagmire. Extricate those ideas and start discovering what you actually what to do. If you were trying to bore us and pull us along endless spaghetti loops of your dialog going nowhere, then kudos to your success.
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2016
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I don't know what I want to do: but I'm having fun doing it. Too generous rate and touching statements: I thank you.
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Ok. Have fun then. Sorry I didn't put that in a sandwich, I read about that after, really. My review may be a bit harsh, alas maybe it is just a bell. Awakening you to the fact that you are presenting your writing for review, and I was merely reviewing. Offering my personal opinion. If this be your passion, your way, so be it. Be on!