Act of Endurance
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Comment from Nika2016
I am giving six stars to balance your bad reviews. This poem is so unique..reading like a zen koan where one must think to answer the puzzle. These word plays are my favorite poems. You sing unique.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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I am giving six stars to balance your bad reviews. This poem is so unique..reading like a zen koan where one must think to answer the puzzle. These word plays are my favorite poems. You sing unique.
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Again many pit, but filling in those gaps, developing better projections. Thanking you for your encouraging thoughts and generous rate.
Comment from Donna B1
I'm sorry but I found this so disjointed and hard to follow. I think personally that you should put this in plain English. Try and tie it together in a better fashion. Perhaps I am missing something that might explain this piece further.
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reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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I'm sorry but I found this so disjointed and hard to follow. I think personally that you should put this in plain English. Try and tie it together in a better fashion. Perhaps I am missing something that might explain this piece further.
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Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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No I suffer such flaws and your views might be right, working on my better English expression of views. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed remarks defining this write.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. This is an interesting philosophical piece. Do you find as I do that writing poems helps one organize their thoughts? What is a Blair salesman?
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Thank you for sharing. This is an interesting philosophical piece. Do you find as I do that writing poems helps one organize their thoughts? What is a Blair salesman?
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Never heard of Blair products, cough syrup and array of medicines. I came to Fanstory seeking an answer to what these notations I wrote really were. Not grammar correct mostly. These notes were breaks from theology research. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Very good, but did I really need a reminder. When I was young I wanted to be older. I didn't know it would be like this. Getting old sucks, but it beats the alternative.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Very good, but did I really need a reminder. When I was young I wanted to be older. I didn't know it would be like this. Getting old sucks, but it beats the alternative.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Never had the alternative, but understand your given valid point. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from Gitasong49
This is an interesting commentary on the use of over the counter medicine in this country. The wording is somewhat awkward. I love the comparison of pills to Frankenstein's monster. Also, the image of a temporary promise of a fountain of youth is good. The Government as pusher is brilliant. Your images are really spot-on.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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This is an interesting commentary on the use of over the counter medicine in this country. The wording is somewhat awkward. I love the comparison of pills to Frankenstein's monster. Also, the image of a temporary promise of a fountain of youth is good. The Government as pusher is brilliant. Your images are really spot-on.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Yeah all my writes suffer these pits and thanks to comments like yours, I smooth hopefully those bumps. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging comment.
Comment from Carole Mertz
This is a difficult poem to read, its pain manifested in bodily illness and struggle. The poem seems to pit pill against pain. For its industrious address to the pharmaceutical inventions and limitations, I give it 5 stars. In stz. 7 you may have meant "momentary" instead of "momentarily," but I may have misinterpreted and later, "pill is an entity," rather than "pill is a entity."
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2016
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This is a difficult poem to read, its pain manifested in bodily illness and struggle. The poem seems to pit pill against pain. For its industrious address to the pharmaceutical inventions and limitations, I give it 5 stars. In stz. 7 you may have meant "momentary" instead of "momentarily," but I may have misinterpreted and later, "pill is an entity," rather than "pill is a entity."
Comment Written 18-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2016
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Great shout out about pits in this write, I will consider these thoughts. Thanking you for your generous rate and inspiring comments.
Comment from foxangie123
So true and a Kool picture. God as well does expect us to use that He has provided as resource. Jesus made many a sacrifice And journeyed far so we must do the same as it isn't as cut and dry.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2016
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So true and a Kool picture. God as well does expect us to use that He has provided as resource. Jesus made many a sacrifice And journeyed far so we must do the same as it isn't as cut and dry.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2016
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I like the picture too, this write aim seems off placed in its intents but still maintained interest to reader. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating conveyances.
Comment from Halfree
I suspect that hidden in a flood of words is some message... I hope. I read right by the message. If you are saying that spiritually can be or is part of healing, then say it. Second paragraph from the end, I do not buy into the definition that science research is only concerned with the accumulation of dollars. History of the healing arts challenges that summation.
Ok, let's talk about the essay, poem, or whatever. The form is a series of loosely joined paragraphs. These paragraphs do not lead the reader through the essay.
The last paragraph would benefit from the liberal application on an eraser, I found it hard to follow.
Again, if you are saying that spiritually can be part of the healing process, then say so.
Think this needs a lot of work.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2016
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I suspect that hidden in a flood of words is some message... I hope. I read right by the message. If you are saying that spiritually can be or is part of healing, then say it. Second paragraph from the end, I do not buy into the definition that science research is only concerned with the accumulation of dollars. History of the healing arts challenges that summation.
Ok, let's talk about the essay, poem, or whatever. The form is a series of loosely joined paragraphs. These paragraphs do not lead the reader through the essay.
The last paragraph would benefit from the liberal application on an eraser, I found it hard to follow.
Again, if you are saying that spiritually can be part of the healing process, then say so.
Think this needs a lot of work.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2016
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A thought with bundled ideals: a fact of awareness of being and trust in. As for product try getting one without paying a price, accumulating your dollars. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
Comment from Joan E.
What an extraordinary artwork and accompaniment to your words. Your prose poem is thought provoking and your "pill" metaphor plus contrasting science and faith are very effective. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
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What an extraordinary artwork and accompaniment to your words. Your prose poem is thought provoking and your "pill" metaphor plus contrasting science and faith are very effective. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 07-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
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Glad this work found delight within your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and captivating comments.
Comment from takikoazn
It started out slow at first. I didn't get into the poem until the fifth verse. Usually I don't read poems written in this form. However, I had to figure out why the picture was chosen for this poem. It makes sense to me now. The poems does shows attention to word choice. Overall, good job and best of luck.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
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It started out slow at first. I didn't get into the poem until the fifth verse. Usually I don't read poems written in this form. However, I had to figure out why the picture was chosen for this poem. It makes sense to me now. The poems does shows attention to word choice. Overall, good job and best of luck.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2016
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Glad something in this work found appeal. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
