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"The Gift of Life Two."

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A book of beautiful poetry about life.

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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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Another creative write for you. I read each stanza and each made me think. I like how you put this together and it easily kept my interest. Great job again.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015
    Thankz ever, forever as ever can be...
    I'll always miss my Jay...
    Ricky1024
Comment from robyn corum
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1.) "My God(!) (W)hat happened to me that (dreadful) (D- 'of') night?"
--> if I understand correctly, that is! *smile*

2.) "(Everything) was (all right)
--> 'alright' is not technically a word - it's a common misspelling.

Ricky, I'm sorry, sweetie, but I didn't understand this post at ALL. Perhaps you need to add more info to your Author Notes?

It's not a story, not a script, and not really a poem in the truest sense. Help!

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2015
    My fault but that was part A and this is part B..
    4...Little Jay...
    Lost Dad.