The Eden Tree
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Wesley John Morgan"A family's need of a miracle is in a Box
6 total reviews
Comment from Wabigoon
Virournet--
That's three in a row. You must have posted a whole bunch all at once. This one helps me get character's straight, whose kid this is, etc. I am reading backwards so I already know the sad, maybe, outcome here.
The writing's excellent, less choppy than the last chapter.
Thanks, enjoyed it.
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
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Virournet--
That's three in a row. You must have posted a whole bunch all at once. This one helps me get character's straight, whose kid this is, etc. I am reading backwards so I already know the sad, maybe, outcome here.
The writing's excellent, less choppy than the last chapter.
Thanks, enjoyed it.
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 23-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
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Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from royowen
Beautifully written, "And Jesus, follow me and I will make you fishers of men" Matthew 4:19, well scribed and presented, having found this incredible bounty, if it was authentic it would carry a king's ransom on it, I found this well designed, the characters believable, the structure verbal and with sense excited tenseness was good, well done, Peter, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Beautifully written, "And Jesus, follow me and I will make you fishers of men" Matthew 4:19, well scribed and presented, having found this incredible bounty, if it was authentic it would carry a king's ransom on it, I found this well designed, the characters believable, the structure verbal and with sense excited tenseness was good, well done, Peter, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Roy,
Thank you very much. Your words always inspire me to go and improve.
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Most welcome
Comment from ellie6
A fascinating find, this has the makings of an exciting story, It held my interest from the beginning. One thing that might help- the corrupt text can be sorted by going into 'edit'and Advanced edit, you will find symbols there to change the text to normal.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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A fascinating find, this has the makings of an exciting story, It held my interest from the beginning. One thing that might help- the corrupt text can be sorted by going into 'edit'and Advanced edit, you will find symbols there to change the text to normal.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
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Ellie,
Thanks for your kind comments. I also appreciate your advice. I am using a programme called 'Write-It' and it appears to screw up on FanStory. I will look at Advanced edit and see how it helps.
Peter
Comment from Eigle Rull
Oh, how I wish I had a six left to give you. This great little chapter was amazing. It was very well written with excellent dialog. However, your ability to describe the brother's surroundings and feelings made the chapter suspenseful and exciting. I really enjoyed it, my friend. It held my attention very well. It was exceptional. Best wishes to you and yours.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Oh, how I wish I had a six left to give you. This great little chapter was amazing. It was very well written with excellent dialog. However, your ability to describe the brother's surroundings and feelings made the chapter suspenseful and exciting. I really enjoyed it, my friend. It held my attention very well. It was exceptional. Best wishes to you and yours.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Thank you very much for your kind comments. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Any advice is very helpful as I prepare for submission to publishers.
Comment from Joyce Long
I am ready to read more. Very, very interesting. The one thing that bothers me is that they found it so quickly. However, if its in God's time what he wants revealed will be revealed. It is wonderful that they have an uncle that can help them.
With the difference in writing style, the AAA's were a distraction.
Excellent!
Joyce 9-14-15
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015
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I am ready to read more. Very, very interesting. The one thing that bothers me is that they found it so quickly. However, if its in God's time what he wants revealed will be revealed. It is wonderful that they have an uncle that can help them.
With the difference in writing style, the AAA's were a distraction.
Excellent!
Joyce 9-14-15
Comment Written 14-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015
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Thanks for your comments. I have only just picked up on the text probs. thanks.
Comment from barkingdog
This is a great beginning to what sounds like a real page-turner mystery.
I'm really curious as to what Uncle Caleb says about their find. Next stop Cairo.
Your text has these strange 'Ã? Ã? Ã? Ã? ' at the beginning of each paragraph. I think it's because you indented.
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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015
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This is a great beginning to what sounds like a real page-turner mystery.
I'm really curious as to what Uncle Caleb says about their find. Next stop Cairo.
Your text has these strange 'Ã? Ã? Ã? Ã? ' at the beginning of each paragraph. I think it's because you indented.
:) e
Comment Written 14-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015
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Thanks very much for your help. I am looking at the text probs.