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Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Montezuma's Sweet Revenge"A collection of 150 word, or less, short stories
8 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
Oops! Wish I could say I could relate to this. Unfortunately, I can eat large amounts of anything and never suffer the consequences. Too bad this character couldn't have chowed down on some more delicious food if he was going to suffer an attack of Montezuma's revenge. You do a great job of describing how he's feeling (like a raging volcano).
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015
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Oops! Wish I could say I could relate to this. Unfortunately, I can eat large amounts of anything and never suffer the consequences. Too bad this character couldn't have chowed down on some more delicious food if he was going to suffer an attack of Montezuma's revenge. You do a great job of describing how he's feeling (like a raging volcano).
Comment Written 14-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little attempt at some humor after some of my recent darker articles, Quandry, for example. Just needed a lighter writing before returning to my normal sad, pitiful, and morbid postings, that I specialize in, again.
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You're very welcome. I like the music lyrics judi
Comment from Halfree
Just could not get into the story....is Johnny a mouse or a person....not sure...mouse flipping on a TV? A person eating something...a dried out bird? I usually get a chuckle from some of your postings. Sorry ol' man this one does not have that Bret touch,
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015
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Just could not get into the story....is Johnny a mouse or a person....not sure...mouse flipping on a TV? A person eating something...a dried out bird? I usually get a chuckle from some of your postings. Sorry ol' man this one does not have that Bret touch,
Comment Written 14-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015
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Does a mouse flipping on a TV make sense to you? Some of my recent writings have delved way down deep, see Quandry for example, and this was written solely for humor. Needed to take a break away from the sad, pitiful, and morbid "Brett" touch. Appreciate your comments and support though. My special touch will not be on vacation for long however.
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Still think you write pretty damn good. Do not always revue. But read a lot. Keep at it. Like I need to say that.
Comment from GE Parson
Brett,
That story is sick.....pun intended.
I have known non health Red Necks who wool do just what your moron in the story did with the.
There was tees two hill billies walking alone a dirt road, when one of them sapped on something that squished thou his toes.
He topped and picked it out and gave it the finger test to determine what he stepped in. Gave it to his friend for the finger test, together one could tell what it was, so...
....the gave it the smell test. Each one gave it the smell test.
"Oh man-o-good berries, that smells terrible" Only on set left, the taste test.
Each hillbilly stuck his tongue out and took a lick, And boy-o- chigger fly agreed it was the worst tasting sruff they had eve tasted.
They finally thou it on the ground and as they walked on and said to each other;
"Man-0-skunk-tail" said the hill Billy who stepped in glob,
"I'm sure glad I didn't step in that stuff.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015
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Brett,
That story is sick.....pun intended.
I have known non health Red Necks who wool do just what your moron in the story did with the.
There was tees two hill billies walking alone a dirt road, when one of them sapped on something that squished thou his toes.
He topped and picked it out and gave it the finger test to determine what he stepped in. Gave it to his friend for the finger test, together one could tell what it was, so...
....the gave it the smell test. Each one gave it the smell test.
"Oh man-o-good berries, that smells terrible" Only on set left, the taste test.
Each hillbilly stuck his tongue out and took a lick, And boy-o- chigger fly agreed it was the worst tasting sruff they had eve tasted.
They finally thou it on the ground and as they walked on and said to each other;
"Man-0-skunk-tail" said the hill Billy who stepped in glob,
"I'm sure glad I didn't step in that stuff.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015
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Enjoyed your little story. Have known some Rednecks who would do something like that. Your comments and support always appreciated.
Comment from MsPetra
Yea, I can say that I've been there too.
I enjoyed this story even though it is told in narration.
You did an excellent job with your grammar and punctuation.
Please keep writing. I will be looking forward to future offerings from you.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Yea, I can say that I've been there too.
I enjoyed this story even though it is told in narration.
You did an excellent job with your grammar and punctuation.
Please keep writing. I will be looking forward to future offerings from you.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this little tale. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A great image for a horror story. Lol.
Yes! By the age of adulthood most have been there.
Hunger will drive man to eat many things BUT I have
to admit I always err on the side of caution when it comes to food.
The story does stir unpleasant memories.
Well done in 150 words.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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A great image for a horror story. Lol.
Yes! By the age of adulthood most have been there.
Hunger will drive man to eat many things BUT I have
to admit I always err on the side of caution when it comes to food.
The story does stir unpleasant memories.
Well done in 150 words.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Wrote this one just for the fun of it. Some of my most recent writings have been on a much more serious note, and needed something light-hearted, so this was it. Glad you enjoyed it, and when it comes to food, it is always better to err on the side of caution. Montezuma's Revenge is no fun at all!
Comment from lancellot
It is a nice short, but other than Johnny being a complete idiot, I'm not sure what the plot of the tale was. Perhaps I missed something.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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It is a nice short, but other than Johnny being a complete idiot, I'm not sure what the plot of the tale was. Perhaps I missed something.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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This was written just for the fun of it. Some of my most recent writings have been on the very serious side and needed something light-hearted for a change. Glad you enjoyed this. Your comments and support appreciated.
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So, you do understand posts written just for fun and not to be taken seriously. I wasn't sure.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
This is a nice little story. Short and sweet and to the point. I enjoyed reading it and also seeing the mouse. They are so cute, but I'm still scared of them. LOL
Kat
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Hi Brett,
This is a nice little story. Short and sweet and to the point. I enjoyed reading it and also seeing the mouse. They are so cute, but I'm still scared of them. LOL
Kat
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Some of my most recent writings have been on the much more serious side and needed something light-hearted for a change. Glad you enjoyed this. Your comments and support appreciated.
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No matter what you write, I always look forward to reading it. You're great!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Just enough said to make us wonder. What did Johnnie stuffed down that made him sick. Have that by accident years ago, instead of throw away some items pass their expiry date, I baked a bread, and made some deserts for the weekend, end up in emergency room with severe diarrhoea. Lol
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Just enough said to make us wonder. What did Johnnie stuffed down that made him sick. Have that by accident years ago, instead of throw away some items pass their expiry date, I baked a bread, and made some deserts for the weekend, end up in emergency room with severe diarrhoea. Lol
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
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Montezuma's Revenge is never fun. Glad you enjoyed this little ditty. Appreciate your comments and support.