Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Shirley, sounds and looks like a beautiful place to live...I love your description of your valley...and the people who have lived...and are living there... the picture beautiful...so very well written...Love ya Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015

Thanks Linda.
A bit of a challenge to say what I wanted to say in rhyme and meter.
I am glad you enjoyed it.
:-) Shirley

reply by l.raven on 17-Sep-2015

always so welcome Shirley...have a wonderful day...luff xxoo love

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

An xcellent poetic tribute to this mountain and your valley surrounding it. Written in excellent aabb rhymed quatrains full of its imagery and history. Is that one of your photo's. Very impressive site. Thanks for sharing the sight and its story.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015

Thank you.
It is a beautiful valley and great place to live.
:-) Shirley

Comment from G.B. Smith

Excellent

Hey there Shirley

I remember when I went to Australia on business to New South Wales i984, I was told about Mount Wollumbin and if I ever returned to go to any of the luxury resorts. I love the Gold Coast and looked forward to returning. NEVER dis. I loved your poem and the rhyme and colors where superb
Nice one
Bear

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015

Thank you,
So near and yet so far it seems.
I am not a fan of the Gold Coast but I do love my valley.
Some urbanisation is creeping in now though which is such a shame.
:-) Shirley.

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Lovely descriptions of this landscape with the towering volcanic mountain. I enjoyed all the interesting information on the history of the mountain and why it was revered by aboriginals. Excellent rhyming. Two things, verse 2, ship's log book/ships' log books. Verse 4, its core (it's = it is) Enjoyable read. faye

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015

Thank you Faye.
I appreciate your review and glitch checks.
I do have real comma issues-in or out?
What I thought I learnt at school now seems all wrong.
"-) Shirley

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

The aboriginal people have always amazed me, and to live in their land is something that must be an honor, and home no matter where is just that. Home. Nice flow and rhyming throughout. Enjoyed the picture your words painted. Les

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015

Thank you for a lovely review.
I appreciate it.
:-) Shirley

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

You did this volcano a wonderful tribute here and after reading it I want to see it. Maybe one day. I'm sure living by it is beautiful and gives your wonderful scenery. Wonderful job friend

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015

Thank you.
I appreciate your thoughts and generous review.
It is a lovely place to live.
:-) Shirley

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Shirley;
-I enjoyed reading your poem about this historical volcano that stands as a sentinel over the land. The writing was very well written and I founded it excellently stylish.
-Each of your rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly also was helpful was the fact that neither of your rhyming was forced nor labored.
-The rhythmic meter being iambic tetrameter And the cadence, timing and tempo wall helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and so very easy.
-Good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concept from one stanza, couplet and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-The imagery was totally excellent and exquisitely expressive in vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout the writing.
-I can see with his volcano acts like a god to the surrounding habitants.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Shirley.
Alex

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015

Thanks Alex.
You always provide detailed and helpful reviews.
:-) Shirley

reply by krys123 on 16-Sep-2015

You are very welcome my friend

Comment from Tessa Kay

Excellent

The way you describe this place, I'd love to visit it some day. It's so nice when people don't get used to the scenery around them and take it for granted, but still appreciate it.
Very much enjoyed your poem. :)

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015

Thank you.
I do appreciate your review.
It is a lovely place to live.
:-) Shirley

Comment from ellie6

Excellent

A charming poem singing the praises of Austraia's high volcano. Many people have attempted the climb , the reward is the view. These high ,almost inaccesible mountains hold mystic power - they are in tune with the stars.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015

Thank you so much.
I do appreciate your review.
:-) Shirley

Comment from robyn corum

Good

1.) Native people watched (on shore?)

2.) If travel (here appeals and draws??)

Just some suggestions to help with rhyming. Feel free to toss them! *smile*

This was a lovely poem about -- what sounds like -- a BEAUTIFUL PLACE!

Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015

Thanks for positive suggestions.
I have tweaked those lines.
:-) Shirley