Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This haiku fills all the requirements both of haiku in general and the rules of this contest specifically. This means that it all depends on the level of "ah hah you" get out of the satori line. Now I think yours is absolutely great - a totally original idea and brilliant into the bargain.

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015

Thank you Pantygynt :)

reply by Pantygynt on 03-Sep-2015

I didn't know this was you. I voted for it.

reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015

thank you :)

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

This is a rather witty piece of poetry dear anonymous! I like the satori, I'm not sure if it could be better.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015

Thank you Rebekka :)

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Hmm. I liked the sort of seasonal role reversal where nudists are now trees instead of people and doing this in the context of autumn. Good luck and cheers.

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015

thank you benjamin :)

Comment from LeslieP5

Excellent

I like this autumn haiku contest entry. The gold and red leaves on the frost covered ground are reminiscent of autumn. The best line is the last "trees' nudist beach."

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thank you Leslie :)

Comment from honeytree

Excellent

Loved the words written for the contest
The leaves that fall from the trees
can be a wonderful gift to receive
The beauty the tree gives can brighten
up our lives.

Honey tree

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thank you Honey :)

reply by honeytree on 03-Sep-2015

Loved what you wrote

Annie

reply by honeytree on 03-Sep-2015

Loved what you wrote

Annie

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

excellent imagery presented in this autumn haiku, I love the satori line, it is brilliant, I enjoyed reading this one, no picture needed. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thank you sweetwoodjax :)

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

gold and red leaves

adorn frost-covered earth

trees' nudist beach

a clever use of words in this haiku - setting a scene for the reader -- well penned, Gypsy Blue

Margaret

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thank you Margaret :)

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

sigh....as they fall to the ground...waiting for their blanket of snow...from one beauty to another...so very nicely written....

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Thank you Raven :)

reply by l.raven on 02-Sep-2015

you are soooo welcome...luff xxoo

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Second review


:-)))




First review (FOUR stars)


I like the witty personification in your closing satori line and the imagery is great. The reason for the four star rating is:

1) because the title uses CAPS which might get this disqualified...so I strongly recommend fixing that.

Additionally, I have one optional suggestion:


adorn frost(-)covered earth

and one spag nit:


tree(')s nudist beach

While punctuation is not permitted, I think an apostrophe does not count that way...but I might be wrong. However since the contest guidelines say hyphens are okay, I think apostrophes should be as well...

Good luck in the contest. Hope you find time to change the title before the committee comes...

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

the rules say no punctuation, I will have to double check. Thank you for your feed back. :)

reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

You were right, I made the changes. Thank you for telling me. :)

reply by rama devi on 02-Sep-2015

Most welcome...Off to upgrade your rating now! :)

Comment from papa55mike

Exceptional

I love this well written poem with a touch of humor at the end.
I am always in awe at the talent it takes these small forms. I'm too wordy.
Have a great week and always, God bless, mike.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015

Hello Mike, Thank you very much for the excellent review. :) thank you for the six stars.