Poems of Love and Spirit
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Making the Most of Moment"This book is about love, God's Love most of all.
42 total reviews
Comment from zanya
Stanzas filled with hope and joy and guidance as to how to approach life at the beginning of a brand new day '...be joyful, letting gladness fill your heart'- and an appropriate pic
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Stanzas filled with hope and joy and guidance as to how to approach life at the beginning of a brand new day '...be joyful, letting gladness fill your heart'- and an appropriate pic
Comment Written 04-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for such an uplifting review, it's alllways encouraging to hear that people like what we write and that it's helpful to tgem. Thanks again for your wonderful review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Great positivity in your write, uplifting with a feel good factor and not concentrating on negative thoughts and influences, being focused always helps, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Great positivity in your write, uplifting with a feel good factor and not concentrating on negative thoughts and influences, being focused always helps, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to review my poem and I appreciate it very much.
Knowing that you found it uplifting and enjoyed the reading of it means a lot to me. With kindness, gudbjorg
Comment from estory
The meter is good but the lines are pretty long here, I suggest cutting it down to a pentameter which creates a more natural flow to the language. The alliterations in the lines sketch out a nice music, and the rhymes echo true, but I think it could also use some images, some color, some shape, some texture, to liven it up, or else it sounds more like prose in an essay. Poetry needs an image to transcend itself, to bring us into a new understanding of an experience. estory
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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The meter is good but the lines are pretty long here, I suggest cutting it down to a pentameter which creates a more natural flow to the language. The alliterations in the lines sketch out a nice music, and the rhymes echo true, but I think it could also use some images, some color, some shape, some texture, to liven it up, or else it sounds more like prose in an essay. Poetry needs an image to transcend itself, to bring us into a new understanding of an experience. estory
Comment Written 29-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Thank you immensely for your very helpful review of my poem, it was encouraging to get to know what could be done more with the poem. Since I read your review on it I did a study on pentameter and that was very informative. I really would like to take this challenge further and if I may send you a new version of the poem for you to go over, would be a big help.?
Thank you again for you great help. With kindness, gudbjorg
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Most English poetry is in iambic pentameter, it kind of has a more natural, conversational sound that way. My suggestion is... read, read, read poetry. Read Shakespeare, read Coleridge, Keats, Yeats, Heaney, read it all, and listen to the possibilities of making music with language. Music is the key, and the images. estory
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Why don't you simply focus on the things that make you wise,
rather than let confusion fill your mind with lies?
It is best to just be joyful, letting gladness fill your heart
instead of facing disarray as your morning falls apart.' I have been to Iceland for an extended stay and like the Swede I am related to I find that they have a very cool and laid back way of looking at things. This poem is a wonderful way to look upon life. I enjoyed it immensely and it's a great life lesson. Thankyou and good luck love Meia xx
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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Why don't you simply focus on the things that make you wise,
rather than let confusion fill your mind with lies?
It is best to just be joyful, letting gladness fill your heart
instead of facing disarray as your morning falls apart.' I have been to Iceland for an extended stay and like the Swede I am related to I find that they have a very cool and laid back way of looking at things. This poem is a wonderful way to look upon life. I enjoyed it immensely and it's a great life lesson. Thankyou and good luck love Meia xx
Comment Written 29-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for giving me such a positive review and that you liked it very much. Glad to hear that you've been in Iceland. Yes, "laid back" and then they're always so "busy. working." Well, it all depends on how we look at things individually. By the way, I'm now living in England with my English husband.
Comment from zekeziemann
Good advice and well-written and explained. I like the rhyming and the flow which leads the reader to the appropriate conclusion.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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Good advice and well-written and explained. I like the rhyming and the flow which leads the reader to the appropriate conclusion.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to review my poem, I was really precious to me. With kindness, gudbjorg
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Gudbjorg,
Marvelous piece of Spiritual Poetry beautifully depicting its theme!
Impressive and matching the theme wording.
Smooth and enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Its positivity is particularly noteworthy.
Entertaining, Educative, and Inspirational!
[It deserves to be honored with SIX STARS, but unfortunately I'm out of the fixed quota now.]
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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Hello Gudbjorg,
Marvelous piece of Spiritual Poetry beautifully depicting its theme!
Impressive and matching the theme wording.
Smooth and enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Its positivity is particularly noteworthy.
Entertaining, Educative, and Inspirational!
[It deserves to be honored with SIX STARS, but unfortunately I'm out of the fixed quota now.]
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for giving me such a marvellous reviews, I'm really honoured. With kindness, gudbjorg
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Gudbjorg, Most Welcome!
~ RP
Comment from jenintorre
I enjoyed reading your poem. I found it very uplifting with very good advice by which to live by. A lovely picture also.
thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I found it very uplifting with very good advice by which to live by. A lovely picture also.
thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for taking your time to review my poem, I'm glad you found it uplifting and helpful. With kindness, gudbjorg
Comment from bob cullen
For me, the highlight of this poem is it's message. You are so right, life is all about positivity.
Love the alliteration in the first line. And the last two lines of verse one are superb. I'd never thought this before, but life really is 'just like a vapour that will fade away.'
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2017
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For me, the highlight of this poem is it's message. You are so right, life is all about positivity.
Love the alliteration in the first line. And the last two lines of verse one are superb. I'd never thought this before, but life really is 'just like a vapour that will fade away.'
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2017
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. Yes, the message is the most important Glad you liked it and that it made a difference in your life.
Comment from Ellie707
Looking at the picture makes me want to relax and enjoy the beauty of the day. The verse flows nicely and there is a lot of sound advice and wisdom found within it.
Bottom line is - we are the masters of our destinies (to a certain point) and God gave us free will to make choices; hopefully, good ones!
Great job!
Ellie
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2017
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Looking at the picture makes me want to relax and enjoy the beauty of the day. The verse flows nicely and there is a lot of sound advice and wisdom found within it.
Bottom line is - we are the masters of our destinies (to a certain point) and God gave us free will to make choices; hopefully, good ones!
Great job!
Ellie
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2017
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review, I'm happy it made you relax and enjoy it. Yes, God gave us all a choice. It is just so simple. With kindness. gudbjorg
Comment from mermaids
I like your theme of focusing on the positive and staying in the moment. There is a smooth flow to your words that adds to the strength of the poem. It is healthy to begin the day with a positive outlook.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2017
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I like your theme of focusing on the positive and staying in the moment. There is a smooth flow to your words that adds to the strength of the poem. It is healthy to begin the day with a positive outlook.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2017
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review, it was really helpful and I appreciate it very much. It's true that the message is the most important thing in a poem, not the structure. With kindness, gudbjorg