Torment and Choices
A different Father's Day Poem91 total reviews
Comment from Annmuma
So glad I have a 6 for this. Content, presentation, truth, and a warning to others. My heart goes out to you and to him. Beautifully written in a way that expresses so much. ann
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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So glad I have a 6 for this. Content, presentation, truth, and a warning to others. My heart goes out to you and to him. Beautifully written in a way that expresses so much. ann
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Hi Ann, thank you so much for the six stars, my friend!! I appreciate your comments on the poem as well. I tried to be honest about a relationship that was pivotal to my life. It was there, but not quite. He and I were open about his addiction and the affect on all our lives. Still didn't make it okay, lol.
Take care, and see you when we can,
Rhonda
Comment from BethShelby
This is sad. Addiction is a terrible thing and to the one addicted I'm sure the realize it has taken so much from them and they would anything for a redo but it feel like an impossibility. It sound like without the addiction, he was quite and impressive man.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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This is sad. Addiction is a terrible thing and to the one addicted I'm sure the realize it has taken so much from them and they would anything for a redo but it feel like an impossibility. It sound like without the addiction, he was quite and impressive man.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Hi Beth, yes, he was an amazing musician and writer. He loved me unconditionally, but he was addicted to alcohol and would go on week and month long binges, leaving his family and responsibilities behind. But, when he was present, there was no greater.
Thanks so much for the review,
Rhonda
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Addictions and alcoholism destroy many lives. I'm sorry for your loss. I know how hard it is.
I like your poem it's well writen Iand heartfelt.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Addictions and alcoholism destroy many lives. I'm sorry for your loss. I know how hard it is.
I like your poem it's well writen Iand heartfelt.
Gypsy
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Hi Gypsy!! Yes, these addictions are tragic, and no more than for the one imprisoned by them.
Thanks for your intuitive review,
Rhonda
Comment from rspoet
Hello Rhoda,
A beautiful poem of the sad reality of addiction and it's impact on many others.
You relate his story with such gentle compassion. A moving first line and stanza.
A member of our poetry gathering read a similar poem about his mother and her addiction at the Mother's Day gathering. A poignant reminder that not everyone has the wonderful memories we often read about.
Addiction often hides behind an impenetrable wall that logic, reason and love
rarely surpass. Causes often buried in DNA and unfathomable experiences.
But you have a positive view of the fatal flaw, despite the tragedy.
Best wishes to you, my friend, and six uplifting stars.
Robert
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Hello Rhoda,
A beautiful poem of the sad reality of addiction and it's impact on many others.
You relate his story with such gentle compassion. A moving first line and stanza.
A member of our poetry gathering read a similar poem about his mother and her addiction at the Mother's Day gathering. A poignant reminder that not everyone has the wonderful memories we often read about.
Addiction often hides behind an impenetrable wall that logic, reason and love
rarely surpass. Causes often buried in DNA and unfathomable experiences.
But you have a positive view of the fatal flaw, despite the tragedy.
Best wishes to you, my friend, and six uplifting stars.
Robert
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Robert, thank you so much for the six stars and for the lovely review. I'm glad I actually had a poem for you, lol.
You got the main point, which is that I still loved and respected him and his gifts. I just regretted the fact the addiction came between us.
DNA, for sure. He and I talked about it often. Alcoholism runs pretty rampantly in my family. It has made me a very careful drinker, meaning I hardly ever do!! My older sister is the same way. We, at least, learned by his mistakes.
Interesting that you and your group just read a similar one for Mother's Day. I think one of my points is that he was my father and I loved him in spite of the flaws he was quite aware of.
Thanks again, my friend,
Rhonda
Comment from Michele Harber
This is equal parts beautiful and heartbreaking. It's sad to have to face a parent's fatal flaw, but lovely that you can still see all the positive assets he had to offer. This in no way reads as a condemnation but, rather, a love poem to a flawed person whose potential you were able to see nonetheless.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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This is equal parts beautiful and heartbreaking. It's sad to have to face a parent's fatal flaw, but lovely that you can still see all the positive assets he had to offer. This in no way reads as a condemnation but, rather, a love poem to a flawed person whose potential you were able to see nonetheless.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Michele, you are so very, very right. You nailed it. My father and I were very open about his addiction and disappointments in himself. It was a love poem to him, just as he would have wanted it - open and honest.
Thanks again,
Rhonda
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That definitely showed, and it was lovely and bittersweet.
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Thank you so much!
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You're welcome! 😀
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wow. This is raw and memorable...and, quite honestly, tremendous. It took a lot of courage, Rhonda, to put yourself out there in this way, but you have made some impressive lemonade from the lemons life handed out. A lesser person might have shrunk away and stayed hidden. You, instead, used your talents in this impressive way. I applaud you. xo
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Wow. This is raw and memorable...and, quite honestly, tremendous. It took a lot of courage, Rhonda, to put yourself out there in this way, but you have made some impressive lemonade from the lemons life handed out. A lesser person might have shrunk away and stayed hidden. You, instead, used your talents in this impressive way. I applaud you. xo
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Hi Rachelle,
Thank you so much for the brilliant six stars. They are as welcome as the comments. Yes, lemonade out of lemons, for sure. He and I were writing buddies. My mother always loved and supported my writing, but my father was the one who inspired me. Still does, actually,
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Dr. Nad
What a well written tribute poem to a man who never lived up to his potential. The truth is, none of us ever really do. I read the authors notes and let me extend my condolences to you and the loss of the man who your father wanted to be. I read in your introduction to fan story of your father's storytelling for you and your sister. We can be thankful for what we had even though we would like to have had more. God bless you.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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What a well written tribute poem to a man who never lived up to his potential. The truth is, none of us ever really do. I read the authors notes and let me extend my condolences to you and the loss of the man who your father wanted to be. I read in your introduction to fan story of your father's storytelling for you and your sister. We can be thankful for what we had even though we would like to have had more. God bless you.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Hi Dr. Nad,
You are so right about my father being an inspiration to me. This poem was written in 2015 for a contest about someone with regrets. My father was important part of my life. He was a published poet, and a novelist. He was a gifted musician and inventor. However, and he would have been the first to admit it, he was self-destructive and made many very unwise choices.
I miss him now as much as I did his reliable presence in my life as a child.
Thank you for your intuitive review!
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You are most welcome Rhonda. I am so glad that you can be proud of the many accomplishments your father did have.
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Indeed!!
Comment from nomi338
When we allow ourselves to forego what should be our utmost commitment, to be a loving father devoted to caring for, and caring about those who are in this world because of our actions. When we ignore that responsibility, we spit in the face of the God who granted us the power to be fathers. An early and unplanned death robs us and our prodigy as well.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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When we allow ourselves to forego what should be our utmost commitment, to be a loving father devoted to caring for, and caring about those who are in this world because of our actions. When we ignore that responsibility, we spit in the face of the God who granted us the power to be fathers. An early and unplanned death robs us and our prodigy as well.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Wow, Nolan, I'm so glad to see you take being a father important. I loved my father, but I can remember him not letting me celebrate Father's Day with him because he said he wasn't deserving of the title. We all make mistakes, and I never expected him to be perfect, but I think his remark was a cop out for not doing his part.
Thank you so much for your review and comments,
Rhonda
Comment from Nicki.B
This is such and personal poem, l love how you paid tribute to him although it's evident he was incapable of being a father figure to you because of his addiction. You are a forgiving emphatic person which is wonderful although I would imagine there was alot of hurt. Very powerful image too, well done
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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This is such and personal poem, l love how you paid tribute to him although it's evident he was incapable of being a father figure to you because of his addiction. You are a forgiving emphatic person which is wonderful although I would imagine there was alot of hurt. Very powerful image too, well done
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Hi Nicki! Thank you so much for your compassionate review! It was deeply personal, which made it hard to write, but, sometimes, it helps to get the emotions out.
I did always forgive him, which he would say he didn't deserve, but I needed him to be my father and holding a grudge would only allow that emotional distance to increast.
Thank you again
Rhonda
Comment from zaraduck6
What a brilliantly written poem! I loved the word choice and literary devices. The rhyme scheme is fabulous, as is the syllable count. Everything is wonderfully executed. Well done!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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What a brilliantly written poem! I loved the word choice and literary devices. The rhyme scheme is fabulous, as is the syllable count. Everything is wonderfully executed. Well done!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much Zara, for your supportive review of this poem. I used to write poetry more often, and thus the repost, but I do enjoy it.
Thanks so much,
Rhonda