2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Senryu ( someone had to pay )"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
23 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
What a cute puppy--is it a Bichon Frise'? I enjoyed your 5-7-5 senryu and your apt play on the "dog-eat-dog" world. Best wishes in the contest and happy weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2015
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What a cute puppy--is it a Bichon Frise'? I enjoyed your 5-7-5 senryu and your apt play on the "dog-eat-dog" world. Best wishes in the contest and happy weekend- Joan
Comment Written 22-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2015
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Thank you Joan, you too. :)
Comment from Pantygynt
Senryu are often humerous and this is no exception. They do say that in dog obedience classes its the humans that actually get trained. I believe the art of having an obedient do is to tell it to do what it was going to do of its own accord.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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Senryu are often humerous and this is no exception. They do say that in dog obedience classes its the humans that actually get trained. I believe the art of having an obedient do is to tell it to do what it was going to do of its own accord.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt :)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements wonderfully with a correct line and syllable count. Poor little thing should have gone into commercial work as it pays better LOL. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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This meets the contest requirements wonderfully with a correct line and syllable count. Poor little thing should have gone into commercial work as it pays better LOL. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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Thank you Mystic, I got good reviews with this little guy but did terrible in the contest. Thank you for the review :)
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That happens often. Two different crowds as many reviewers never go to the polls and vote.
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Yes, sad but true. I signed up to vote so I get notices when there is an open booth.
thank you :)
Comment from seaglass
I saw this darling picture on face book. How anyone could train a dog to do this is beyond me. You successfully used the inspiration to write a perfect senryu. I wonder if they held him to the pole with Felcro.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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I saw this darling picture on face book. How anyone could train a dog to do this is beyond me. You successfully used the inspiration to write a perfect senryu. I wonder if they held him to the pole with Felcro.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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LOL me too. Thank you seaglass :)
Comment from LeslieP5
I like your photo of the cute dog and the senryu topic. Your syllable count is right and I like your last line especially - "it's a dog-eat-dog world." That gives a broader meaning to the poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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I like your photo of the cute dog and the senryu topic. Your syllable count is right and I like your last line especially - "it's a dog-eat-dog world." That gives a broader meaning to the poem. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thank you Leslie :)
Comment from Leineco
LOL - Pole dancing puppy working to pay the bills! (What an adorable picture :-)
Great use of humor in the senryu form :-)
Good Luck in the booth :-) :-) :-)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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LOL - Pole dancing puppy working to pay the bills! (What an adorable picture :-)
Great use of humor in the senryu form :-)
Good Luck in the booth :-) :-) :-)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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thank you Leineco :)
Comment from zanya
Yes this one raises a chuckle - this little canine seems to have a very good idea as to how the real world works -interesting reflection on that time-honored adage in the final line
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Yes this one raises a chuckle - this little canine seems to have a very good idea as to how the real world works -interesting reflection on that time-honored adage in the final line
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thank you zanya :)
Comment from papa55mike
Great job on this poem and well written. I am always in awe at the talent it takes to write one of these small forms. I'm way too wordy. Interesting picture.
Have a great week and God bless, mike.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Great job on this poem and well written. I am always in awe at the talent it takes to write one of these small forms. I'm way too wordy. Interesting picture.
Have a great week and God bless, mike.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thank you Mike :)
Comment from Tessa Kay
What a cute picture!
I wonder do they teach dog pole dancing in dog training centres?
Cute picture, cute topic. All the best in the contest.
:)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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What a cute picture!
I wonder do they teach dog pole dancing in dog training centres?
Cute picture, cute topic. All the best in the contest.
:)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thank you Tessa, the senryu is about a dog that had to strip and pole dance to pay for her education. ;)
Comment from Domino 2
I dunno about 'obedience class' - it seems THAT dog may have taken pole-dancing classes. ;-)
Maybe, with respect, sub 2nd line 'dog' with 'mutt', as you have three 'dog' in two lines.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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I dunno about 'obedience class' - it seems THAT dog may have taken pole-dancing classes. ;-)
Maybe, with respect, sub 2nd line 'dog' with 'mutt', as you have three 'dog' in two lines.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thank you Domino