The Comeback
150 word story16 total reviews
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mikey
You steal the show as usual. Great fun story with a twist. Elvis holds the smoking gun. Poor bugger, can he ever rest? Fabulous presentation. Clever theme. Just one thing, had he eaten the lobster? All that chaos, and it hadn't even happened yet. Hahahaha! You don't lose it that's for sure. Congratulations on your win. I guess the others had no chance? Thanks for the laugh. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Hi Mikey
You steal the show as usual. Great fun story with a twist. Elvis holds the smoking gun. Poor bugger, can he ever rest? Fabulous presentation. Clever theme. Just one thing, had he eaten the lobster? All that chaos, and it hadn't even happened yet. Hahahaha! You don't lose it that's for sure. Congratulations on your win. I guess the others had no chance? Thanks for the laugh. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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The lobster was definitely consumed at some point. There's crime and then there's CRIME! This was fun. I can always count on Elvis. The picture is of Andy Kaufman a comedian who everyone thought faked his death. He did a great Elvis impersonation. My little joke to well, myself. :)) mikey
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Awe shucks ... I was going to invite myself to dinner. YES< sometimes it's CRIMINAL what wins a contest. Hahahahaha! jk *Smirk* Not familiar with Andy Kauffman ... has he turned up since?
Luvverly to hear from you. Smiles and huggies - Lovi xoxo
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! I have missed a lot I've been writing too much and got waaayyyy behind on reading. Sure glad I found this now, and it's no wonder you won the contest. Elvis will never really die, will he? LOL! :)
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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LOL! I have missed a lot I've been writing too much and got waaayyyy behind on reading. Sure glad I found this now, and it's no wonder you won the contest. Elvis will never really die, will he? LOL! :)
Comment Written 28-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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I'm just behind. You name it. You are writing some seriously great stuff. Wow, such variety.
Glad you liked this. The picture is Andy Kaufman who everyone thought faked his own death. He did a killer Elvis impersonation. A little joke to amuse myself. Ha! Sorry to be so late in responding, but sadly it's better than I usually do, isn't it. :)) mikey
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi...
_ I happily give this my last sixer!
_ This is such a great story of clever writing and creativity with the surprise ending!
_ Such a great piece of writing.
_ BRAVO! This gets my vote.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Hi...
_ I happily give this my last sixer!
_ This is such a great story of clever writing and creativity with the surprise ending!
_ Such a great piece of writing.
_ BRAVO! This gets my vote.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Wow. I'm so delighted with your response. I'd do a cartwheel if it wouldn't kill me! What a great review and awesome stars. I win regardless. Thank you so much!
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True to my word---I voted. (*<*)
You're very welcome.
Comment from kittykatnoel
Excellent entry for the contest, I especially enjoyed the twist at the end. The funniest and most creative use of the words and the prompt. Well done and thank you for sharing your writing.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Excellent entry for the contest, I especially enjoyed the twist at the end. The funniest and most creative use of the words and the prompt. Well done and thank you for sharing your writing.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Wow. I'm smiling. Thank you so much. I'm pleased you enjoyed!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Blue font, a picture of an Elvis impersonator at the conclusion...this could be but one author, and I know it ain't me, Mikey... ha-ha!
While I have absolutely no clue what it's about (except that Shaq is featured as a rookie cop) , I'm sure someone out there in FanStory land will and you'll do very well in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Blue font, a picture of an Elvis impersonator at the conclusion...this could be but one author, and I know it ain't me, Mikey... ha-ha!
While I have absolutely no clue what it's about (except that Shaq is featured as a rookie cop) , I'm sure someone out there in FanStory land will and you'll do very well in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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The Elvis impersonator is Andy Kaufman! There's a lot of people who swear he faked his death and is still alive. Thus the ending. An inside joke that probably stayed inside my room. Hahaha. Jeesh. I even left the box out this time. I'm soooo obvious ... whoever I am. :)))
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
I love it!!!! Perfect writing, perfect story, and Elvis lives. What more could a person want? The artwork is great. Best wishes in the contest. Kudos on a job well done.
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I love it!!!! Perfect writing, perfect story, and Elvis lives. What more could a person want? The artwork is great. Best wishes in the contest. Kudos on a job well done.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
150 word story
The Comeback
Good job getting all the words in for this content. The story was pretty good but I am not sure what happened at the end. Good luck with the contest.
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150 word story
The Comeback
Good job getting all the words in for this content. The story was pretty good but I am not sure what happened at the end. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
Comment from lancellot
Interesting. I'm not really sure what is happening. I think it is a bit humor flash fiction, combined with police action. The Elvis part was unexpected.
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Interesting. I'm not really sure what is happening. I think it is a bit humor flash fiction, combined with police action. The Elvis part was unexpected.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
Comment from mommerry
Your story was successful in using all of the words and it was also successful in surprising the reader at the surprise sighting of good old - but very dead- Elvis.
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Your story was successful in using all of the words and it was also successful in surprising the reader at the surprise sighting of good old - but very dead- Elvis.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
Comment from Bill Schott
You set up a really nice scene and have presented the text in an attractive fashion. All the words were used and seemed to make sense, although vinegar was a stretch. Nice job.
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You set up a really nice scene and have presented the text in an attractive fashion. All the words were used and seemed to make sense, although vinegar was a stretch. Nice job.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015