(haiku) ivy covered pine
haiku contest3 total reviews
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hi. I could definitely see how the pine can transform itself to become a sanctuary. This vividly illustrates and supports symbiosis. Good luck in the contest. Cheers.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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Hi. I could definitely see how the pine can transform itself to become a sanctuary. This vividly illustrates and supports symbiosis. Good luck in the contest. Cheers.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from AnnieDawn
I liked your poem and found that you used all seventeen syllables in it which is difficult to do and have make sense. You seem to have covered all he contest rules. A good job and good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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I liked your poem and found that you used all seventeen syllables in it which is difficult to do and have make sense. You seem to have covered all he contest rules. A good job and good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a well done haiku. I can just visualize the ivy twining around the pine tree, like a stepladder for the birds.
Good concrete imagery. The entry follows the rules, with the possible exception of "no reader's notes": reader's notes actually have been sneaked in above the title, posing as a description line. That is the only reason I rated this 4 stars. (Let me know if you should change that, and I will change my rating.) Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
(P.S. I see you took out the comments from the description line, and therefore I have changed my rating to 5 stars.)
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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This is a well done haiku. I can just visualize the ivy twining around the pine tree, like a stepladder for the birds.
Good concrete imagery. The entry follows the rules, with the possible exception of "no reader's notes": reader's notes actually have been sneaked in above the title, posing as a description line. That is the only reason I rated this 4 stars. (Let me know if you should change that, and I will change my rating.) Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
(P.S. I see you took out the comments from the description line, and therefore I have changed my rating to 5 stars.)
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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When I tried to save it, it would not save kept reminding me that I did not fill in the descriptive line. Will see if I can delete it.
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Wasn't intentional. system stopped me from saving until filled out. I just went in and deleted and replaced with haiku contest....thanks
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Great. I just noticed that and changed the rating to 5 stars.