Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Mr. Sun"Dawn of Chaos
26 total reviews
Comment from beizanten
a short but beautiful imaginary as opening stanza. again good imaginary for second stanza. a pretty good third and fourth stanza. Overall a quite good poetry but not great
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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a short but beautiful imaginary as opening stanza. again good imaginary for second stanza. a pretty good third and fourth stanza. Overall a quite good poetry but not great
Comment Written 06-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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I feel you, needing revisions most of my writes, suffering various pits in given conveyances. Glad some aspects in this work found appeal, thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Donka Kristeva
This write has some very nice images and descriptive words. But the lines don't connect with each other. A consistent line of thought is missing
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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This write has some very nice images and descriptive words. But the lines don't connect with each other. A consistent line of thought is missing
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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I feel your thought, needing a more coherent accessing of its given concept, appreciating your input on this work: plus thanking you for your generous rate dispute mentioned features.
Comment from Sanku
Light slices parting....flee from dices aim to flare at my face
I liked this stanza .Anyway Mr Sun is struggling hard to wake up the earthlings.
he prefers people to endure and achieve.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
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Light slices parting....flee from dices aim to flare at my face
I liked this stanza .Anyway Mr Sun is struggling hard to wake up the earthlings.
he prefers people to endure and achieve.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
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Yeah, my buddy has his ways to dry your throat, viewing all about the sun a good watcher, thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
Thank you for your lovely poem about 'Mr. Sun.' The sun does indeed give us joy, energy, and light. Your little tribute tells of so many more benefits we receive from this great gift from God.
~Mustang Patty~
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
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Hi there,
Thank you for your lovely poem about 'Mr. Sun.' The sun does indeed give us joy, energy, and light. Your little tribute tells of so many more benefits we receive from this great gift from God.
~Mustang Patty~
Comment Written 20-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
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Glad you found tingles to your interests within this write, thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from 24chas
I enjoyed this piece, TPAC. It had a good flow to it and I think you some really nice imagery as well. The rhymes gave it a good rhythm, so overall a good poem.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
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I enjoyed this piece, TPAC. It had a good flow to it and I think you some really nice imagery as well. The rhymes gave it a good rhythm, so overall a good poem.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
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I appreciate your delights about this particular write, finding my own reward by this given response by you, encouraging comments that I might be venturing the right way. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from kiwijenny
Sometimes I get bent out of shape trying to review your poems. But I've just realized something I need to step back and read, not get close and nit picky. When I stepped back it was a fun read. The sun shouts it slaps us to get up and enjoy life
God bless
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Sometimes I get bent out of shape trying to review your poems. But I've just realized something I need to step back and read, not get close and nit picky. When I stepped back it was a fun read. The sun shouts it slaps us to get up and enjoy life
God bless
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Some of that is my blame, learning to improve my communicating skills, having revisions. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
You surely captured the journey of the Sun and how it brings back our daylight.
Yes, we all fight the fact that it is time to arise again, but Lordy who knew what the Sun was doing to get there. Well done!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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You surely captured the journey of the Sun and how it brings back our daylight.
Yes, we all fight the fact that it is time to arise again, but Lordy who knew what the Sun was doing to get there. Well done!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Glad aspects in this write were found appealing, thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Cherubel
You have said so much about the sun, I gather you like waking to it since that's when it really hits you. Like I'm here you cant ignore me and if you do I will still be here every time you wake up and I'm all over you
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
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You have said so much about the sun, I gather you like waking to it since that's when it really hits you. Like I'm here you cant ignore me and if you do I will still be here every time you wake up and I'm all over you
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
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Yeah, the sun holds its facts for existing life, steering us through its course. Glad certain aspects were found appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Seems the sun is playing games with sleeper, shining its' glaring rays bouncing all over the hall and room walls, shining and glaring in the face of this person who wishes not to awaken yet. NICE. liberty justice
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Seems the sun is playing games with sleeper, shining its' glaring rays bouncing all over the hall and room walls, shining and glaring in the face of this person who wishes not to awaken yet. NICE. liberty justice
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Down to earth innocent fun, this event must have occurred with you as well. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how Mr. Sun appears and acts more than a friend, philosopher and guide and makes day beginning good morning; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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This speaks how Mr. Sun appears and acts more than a friend, philosopher and guide and makes day beginning good morning; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Glad this write gave you a little delight. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting thought.
