Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

Well,...better late than never they say! I can't believe I missed the deadline to review all of these nature haiku entries in such a wonderful contest! That said, Ray set out a wonderful challenge to all of us and you certainly met it in spades. Love the visual of the radiant sun descending behind the mountain. Definitely can "see" that. Implied kigo is summer. What I look for, in particular, is a strong juxtaposition between two concrete objects (one described in two lines and one in the third line) that provide an AHA for me. You certainly accomplished that with your brilliant phrase "sunny side up" which can take on two different meanings and provides an AHA either way. Loved this 'ku! One of the best of some great entries. Sue

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

thank you Sue. I had great hopes for this haiku but came in 2nd. Thank you for the review :)

Comment from angel123

Excellent

I love your well written poem. Your last line is cleverly written and it held my attention. I like your background color. An artwork choice would have been nice.

Angel123

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

Thank you angel :)

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Hi Gypsy Blue Rose. Ah, the call for dinner instead of breakfast and no more rooster waking me up in the morning. Nice twist for sunny side up. Cheers.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015

Thank you benjamin :)

Comment from irishauthorme

Excellent

Second review on this, for some reason my first was erased, another glitch from FS.
Liked your different take on the sunset, never thought of it that way and it was delightful.
This is one of the best entries in this contest, you chose and follow a theme that has a logical ending.
irish

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015

Thank you Irish :)

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

There's something playful about your use of 'descends',
then coming back with your 'sunny-side up' satori.
I have a little trouble with an orb having sides, but I understand the playfulness.

Best of luck.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015

Thank you Lee :)

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is an interesting haiku with creative language, particularly "sunny side up." The concrete imagery is well done and I can visualize the scene from your words. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015

Thank you Jeanie :)

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Hello Gypsy :) This is a delightful presentation and your final line says it all. I like the image you have put in my mind of the sun rising behind the mountain. Sunny side up sounds perfect :) Good luck in this contest. If I can get through all the reviews required to be able to vote, you will receive my vote!

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2015

Thank you for the review and the vote. :)

Comment from Unspoken94

Excellent

I can feel the sun as you describe it. When in the mountains, the morning sun in the crisp air is a wonderful feeling. You caught this feeling in such a brief way. You have my vote, of course. -Bill

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2015

Thank you for the great review and for your vote. :)

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Yes. This one seems to fill all the requirements and the satori line is amusing as well. Nice one. But FS won't let me out yet so I have to say I like this one a great deal.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2015

FS won't let you out? Thank you very much for the excellent review. :)

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

This image of the yellow sun dropping behind mountains is wittily juxtaposed with the pun on Sunnyside Up. A great idea, well composed. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2015

Thank you mfowler, I appreciate the review and the good wishes. :)