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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
YAY!! YOU WON!!! About time too. This was brilliant, no one would wish to live forever if they have to carry on living like that. That is a horror story and a nightmare if you have to live it. Congratulations on your well deserved win, Bill. It deserved it. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 07-May-2022
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YAY!! YOU WON!!! About time too. This was brilliant, no one would wish to live forever if they have to carry on living like that. That is a horror story and a nightmare if you have to live it. Congratulations on your well deserved win, Bill. It deserved it. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 07-May-2022
reply by the author on 07-May-2022
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I recall tying with Michael Cahill. His horror story was that Donald Trump was running for President.
Comment from Joy Graham
Congratulations on winning this contest. I admire you for squishing a story into 100 words. You got me at the very end with the eyeball. Would this guy be like a zombie? That would be horrible to have no successful methods of suicide no matter how effective they should be.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Congratulations on winning this contest. I admire you for squishing a story into 100 words. You got me at the very end with the eyeball. Would this guy be like a zombie? That would be horrible to have no successful methods of suicide no matter how effective they should be.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Joy, for the nice review. Bill
Comment from mfowler
Very nice mini-flash with great horror elements. A gypsy curse, a series of failed suicides to alleviate the angst of 'forever living', and an eyeball scraped from the mirror. Yes, a lot of horror neatly packaged and well delivered. Congratulations on your win.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Very nice mini-flash with great horror elements. A gypsy curse, a series of failed suicides to alleviate the angst of 'forever living', and an eyeball scraped from the mirror. Yes, a lot of horror neatly packaged and well delivered. Congratulations on your win.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Mark, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Michaelk
That would suck. I especially loved the ending. It almost felt like he was grumbling like his coffee was cold instead of pulling his eyeball off the mirror. I've written a story similar to this but not so short. It is a very intriguing concept. Being undead usually means mindless like a zombie. But having the brain to understand the horror of what's happened would increase it a hundred fold. You have a bit of a line break problem in your story, but other than that it was magnificent.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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That would suck. I especially loved the ending. It almost felt like he was grumbling like his coffee was cold instead of pulling his eyeball off the mirror. I've written a story similar to this but not so short. It is a very intriguing concept. Being undead usually means mindless like a zombie. But having the brain to understand the horror of what's happened would increase it a hundred fold. You have a bit of a line break problem in your story, but other than that it was magnificent.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Michael, for giving this a look. I don't know what to say about the line break issue. Without indentation (which doesn't seem to be available) or a consistent right justification on the typed lines, what appears becomes random and dependent on whatever device its being viewed on. Happy day.
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I know, it's strange sometimes. I have to go back and edit my own stories often.
Comment from trimple
Hi there, Bill
What a clever write! Love the pun in the first line LOL Yuk!
Having entered the same contest, I realise how difficult it is to give your all to a story with only 100 words. You succeeded brilliantly.
Gory, clever and well told. Bravo
Much love
tracey
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Hi there, Bill
What a clever write! Love the pun in the first line LOL Yuk!
Having entered the same contest, I realise how difficult it is to give your all to a story with only 100 words. You succeeded brilliantly.
Gory, clever and well told. Bravo
Much love
tracey
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Tracey, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Ugh... gory ending, but a great story! To be forced to live with all that pain and now disfiguration is worse than death. She knew he wanted death, so she cursed him with life. Verrrry clever and well done, Bill. :)
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Ugh... gory ending, but a great story! To be forced to live with all that pain and now disfiguration is worse than death. She knew he wanted death, so she cursed him with life. Verrrry clever and well done, Bill. :)
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Phyllis, for the outstanding review. Bill
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello Bill,
~Living~reminds me of a Stephen King story called 'Thinner'. What a horrible curse! The ending was pretty gruesome. Good job keeping within 100 words.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Hello Bill,
~Living~reminds me of a Stephen King story called 'Thinner'. What a horrible curse! The ending was pretty gruesome. Good job keeping within 100 words.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Thank you, GBR, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Gloria ....
Oh dear! Now this would most certainly be a nightmare, Bill. Now poor Doug is going to go on living for ever and ever and sadly nothing like the dreamy endings contained in fairy tales. He better take it easy on what's left of his body. This story could really go places though.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Oh dear! Now this would most certainly be a nightmare, Bill. Now poor Doug is going to go on living for ever and ever and sadly nothing like the dreamy endings contained in fairy tales. He better take it easy on what's left of his body. This story could really go places though.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Gloria, for the great review. Bill
Comment from krys123
Bill;
-I have watched movies of such an idea and concept but you have written it with such more force and dramatic structure. I really liked your writing very much Bill and convinced me that this writing of a man who could not die because of a curse was definitely well written and composed with a concept that was very well thought out.
-Your definite imagination is very gifted and truly inventive and ingeniously creative.
-Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Bill;
-I have watched movies of such an idea and concept but you have written it with such more force and dramatic structure. I really liked your writing very much Bill and convinced me that this writing of a man who could not die because of a curse was definitely well written and composed with a concept that was very well thought out.
-Your definite imagination is very gifted and truly inventive and ingeniously creative.
-Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Alex, for the excellent review. Bill
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You are so sincerely welcome Bill
Comment from Jay Squires
Well, with the accumulation of attempts, he's not going to be looking too good after the next one.
This is not an easy challenge. I tried it once, failed miserably. Ha! I just caught the pun in the first line.
You are one witty devil, Bill.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Well, with the accumulation of attempts, he's not going to be looking too good after the next one.
This is not an easy challenge. I tried it once, failed miserably. Ha! I just caught the pun in the first line.
You are one witty devil, Bill.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Jay, for the great review. I think you're the only reviewer who saw the pun. Bill