2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "5/7/5 ( Bare Dry Land Dreams Of )"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
13 total reviews
Comment from pickmeplease
Living in CA I can relate to drought conditions. Your last line speaks volumes...brown is even the new green. I like your color choices for text and background. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Living in CA I can relate to drought conditions. Your last line speaks volumes...brown is even the new green. I like your color choices for text and background. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you pickmeplease :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, sad to say many out west here in the United States are faced with this harsh reality every day.
-Good consonance of "s" in your second line
-syllable count is right on
-good imagery created overall on a hot topic
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Well, sad to say many out west here in the United States are faced with this harsh reality every day.
-Good consonance of "s" in your second line
-syllable count is right on
-good imagery created overall on a hot topic
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you handsome :)
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You're welcome, "G". ;)
Comment from angel123
I like your nature poem and your message. Your poem flows well and your artwork choice enhances your poem. Good luck in the contest.
Angel123
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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I like your nature poem and your message. Your poem flows well and your artwork choice enhances your poem. Good luck in the contest.
Angel123
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you Angel :) Thank you for the six stars!
Comment from mvbrooks
I've seen similar images of former river beds. Your words very effectively describe this phenomena.
Your line count and syllable count are accurate.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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I've seen similar images of former river beds. Your words very effectively describe this phenomena.
Your line count and syllable count are accurate.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you mvbrooks :)
Comment from Joan E.
Your description reminds me of our four-year drought in California. I admired your use of personification, alliteration and equating "golden" to "green". Best wishes in the Nature 5-7-5 contest- Joan, from the fjords of Norway
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Your description reminds me of our four-year drought in California. I admired your use of personification, alliteration and equating "golden" to "green". Best wishes in the Nature 5-7-5 contest- Joan, from the fjords of Norway
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you Joan :)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a correct line and syllable count. The imagery in the first two lines is vivid and the satori delivers a stunning observation. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a correct line and syllable count. The imagery in the first two lines is vivid and the satori delivers a stunning observation. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you Mystic Angel :)
Comment from LeslieP5
The deserts and we need that cool rain and luscious blue sea. I hope golden is not the new green. We need our greens to help plants and animals flourish. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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The deserts and we need that cool rain and luscious blue sea. I hope golden is not the new green. We need our greens to help plants and animals flourish. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you Leslie, I agree. :)
Comment from ellie6
A descriptive piece of verse. The illustration is particularl good. I like the last line -golden is the new green. A well written and descriptive piece.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
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A descriptive piece of verse. The illustration is particularl good. I like the last line -golden is the new green. A well written and descriptive piece.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
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thank you ellie :)
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mystery author, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, the words speak volumes about our planet today, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
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Hi Mystery author, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, the words speak volumes about our planet today, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
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Thank you Eric, you are very kind. :)
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You are very welcome my friend
Comment from Ben Colder
Makes me thirsty just looking at it. Made me think of the young poet who writes about Austrian desert survival. Good entry. Good luck
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
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Makes me thirsty just looking at it. Made me think of the young poet who writes about Austrian desert survival. Good entry. Good luck
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
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Thank you Ben :)