For Mum
A surprise33 total reviews
Comment from Tpa
A very good story. You followed the prompt, beautifully. You had all the ingredients of a story, beginning, middle, ending plus a character that the reader would be sympathetic to. Indeed, a good premise for the book you want to write.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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A very good story. You followed the prompt, beautifully. You had all the ingredients of a story, beginning, middle, ending plus a character that the reader would be sympathetic to. Indeed, a good premise for the book you want to write.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much for your awesome rating and I am so glad you likedit even though I was so restricted in the word count. Thanks again. I am quite looking forward to get started on writing the book. All the best, Ulla
Comment from Serendipity!
Not that I could have known, it would be in California that I would do this particular journey. (how about: Not that I could have known my journey would bring me to California.)yet know (,) and
You really got the suspense there in a few short lines. Congrats!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Not that I could have known, it would be in California that I would do this particular journey. (how about: Not that I could have known my journey would bring me to California.)yet know (,) and
You really got the suspense there in a few short lines. Congrats!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thanks. The journey was not about going to California, the journey was that of seeing my mother and it so happened to be in California. I am sorry you didn't like it. Ulla
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I must have said that wrong. I meant 'my journey to see my mother would bring me to California. ' I did like it.
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I must have said that wrong. I meant 'my journey to see my mother would bring me to California. ' I did like it.
Comment from meggie13
First of all, congratulations in finding your mother. It must have been a very exciting day. You most probably had many questions just as she must have had some of her own. It is well written and the picture mirrors your story.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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First of all, congratulations in finding your mother. It must have been a very exciting day. You most probably had many questions just as she must have had some of her own. It is well written and the picture mirrors your story.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you very much for your review. Yes it was something else. Ulla
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You are very welcome , Ulla. meggie :)
Comment from royowen
I really can't wait to read the full story one day, for you to meet your real mum is amazing, it could be so hard to do. The myriad of emotions you must have felt! Good luck in the 80 words or less contest, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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I really can't wait to read the full story one day, for you to meet your real mum is amazing, it could be so hard to do. The myriad of emotions you must have felt! Good luck in the 80 words or less contest, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Roy. It was emotional all right. I have decided that I will write the full story . All the best Ulla
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Well done Ulla
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That must have been a BIG surprise for you birth mother. I would love to read the whole story, I hope it worked out well for you both. Excellent contest entry, I doubt there is a better one. Good luck! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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That must have been a BIG surprise for you birth mother. I would love to read the whole story, I hope it worked out well for you both. Excellent contest entry, I doubt there is a better one. Good luck! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Hi Sandra, Thank you ever so much. It was emotional to say the least. I have decided to write the story. Ulla
Comment from Eric1
Hi Ulla, this is an excellent entry for this particular competition, a wonderful tale of a reunion between mother and daughter, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Hi Ulla, this is an excellent entry for this particular competition, a wonderful tale of a reunion between mother and daughter, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you Eric, I much appreciate your words. Ulla
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It was a pleasure Ulla.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I just can't imagine not
knowing your birth-mother;
no wonder the meeting is
so emotional, Ulla.
good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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I just can't imagine not
knowing your birth-mother;
no wonder the meeting is
so emotional, Ulla.
good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you very much for this review Margaret. Well I was adopted and I always knew that. It was great though to find my roots. One day soon I will write the full story. There is a lot to it. All the best, Ulla
Comment from Nosha17
You captured the element of surprise well in your story, and within the word limit. Sounds like a very interesting story, I look forward to reading it some time. Well narrated and most readable. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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You captured the element of surprise well in your story, and within the word limit. Sounds like a very interesting story, I look forward to reading it some time. Well narrated and most readable. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much and I will definitely write the full story. It's quite a tale. Ulla
Comment from Asumini
Wow! Impressive. What I like most about your piece is while it is a complete story on its own if you wanted to expand you could. I'd like to know where the daughter is traveling from, and how her mother responds to her.
Asumini
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Wow! Impressive. What I like most about your piece is while it is a complete story on its own if you wanted to expand you could. I'd like to know where the daughter is traveling from, and how her mother responds to her.
Asumini
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Well I am going to write that biography one day. Thanks a lot for your encouraging review. Ulla
Comment from MelB
This would definitely be a surprise, especially after 40 years. Did she know when she saw you crying, that you were her daughter? I hope it was a great visit!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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This would definitely be a surprise, especially after 40 years. Did she know when she saw you crying, that you were her daughter? I hope it was a great visit!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much. No initially she didn't, but it soon came to her. We had seven wonderful years until her death. Ulla