2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "5/7/5 (frozen puddle game)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from Bill Schott
This five-seven-five about winter, Frozen Puddle Game, has the proper syllable count and a great memory of childhood. Busting those frozen puddles. Nice.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2015
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This five-seven-five about winter, Frozen Puddle Game, has the proper syllable count and a great memory of childhood. Busting those frozen puddles. Nice.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2015
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Thank you Bill :)
Comment from BeasPeas
This is clever, interesting and true. I like the photo you chose. It reminds me of my younger grandson who does this all the time before leaving for school. Now his shoes and sox are wet and he's miserable. Good job.
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This is clever, interesting and true. I like the photo you chose. It reminds me of my younger grandson who does this all the time before leaving for school. Now his shoes and sox are wet and he's miserable. Good job.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2015
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Thank you BeasPeas :)
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You are welcome. Got my vote.
Comment from acerisestory
You've written a very nice winter 5-7-5, mystery poet. It reminded me of my childhood (jumping on the thin ice), as well as the fun of our two sons as children (Colorado natives).
I particularly like your last line (satori) - very clever play on words: "child's ice escapades."
This is a fine entry for the contest. Best of luck! Alana
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You've written a very nice winter 5-7-5, mystery poet. It reminded me of my childhood (jumping on the thin ice), as well as the fun of our two sons as children (Colorado natives).
I particularly like your last line (satori) - very clever play on words: "child's ice escapades."
This is a fine entry for the contest. Best of luck! Alana
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
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Thank you Alana :)
Comment from angel123
Your winter poem is well thought out and written. I enjoyed reading it and it flows well. Your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts.
Angel123
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Your winter poem is well thought out and written. I enjoyed reading it and it flows well. Your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts.
Angel123
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
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Thank you angel :)
Comment from Pen of Fire
Every child who comes in contact with a puddle of water cannot seam to resist the urge to jump in. Why, heaven only knows. Great job with this entry and the picture is perfect.
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Every child who comes in contact with a puddle of water cannot seam to resist the urge to jump in. Why, heaven only knows. Great job with this entry and the picture is perfect.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
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Thank you Pend of Fire :)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements with a correct line and syllable count. Clever play on the ice show theme in the last line. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This meets the contest requirements with a correct line and syllable count. Clever play on the ice show theme in the last line. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
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Thank you Mystic Angel :)
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This so well expresses the simple joys and wonder of childhood. As we age, we fear breaking a hip. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie.
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This so well expresses the simple joys and wonder of childhood. As we age, we fear breaking a hip. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
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Thank you Debbie :)
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mystery author, this is an excellent entry for this particular competition, we've all done this in our childhood, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
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Hi Mystery author, this is an excellent entry for this particular competition, we've all done this in our childhood, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
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Thank you Eric :)
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Amy Greta
YES! I remember playing the frozen puddle game as a child...sometimes the puddle was so frozen, I slipped into the snow:) I love your last line about child's ice escapades, very clever and a great childhood memory.
Best of luck,
Amy
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YES! I remember playing the frozen puddle game as a child...sometimes the puddle was so frozen, I slipped into the snow:) I love your last line about child's ice escapades, very clever and a great childhood memory.
Best of luck,
Amy
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
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Thank you Amy :)
Comment from poetadeu
You have kept the requirements for
syllable count in three lines while
presenting a clear picture of a child
wanting to test the ice to see if it
breaks or whatever else might occur.
Nice entry for the contest.
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You have kept the requirements for
syllable count in three lines while
presenting a clear picture of a child
wanting to test the ice to see if it
breaks or whatever else might occur.
Nice entry for the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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thank you :)
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You're so welcome::}Joyce