Comment from
The Mom/DarleneThomson
A lovely sad love poem. It flows very well. The starkness of the colouring shows the sadness in your heart. Best wishes if this is a contest entry. I wouldn't change a thing.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
Hi: What is the difference between a 5 start poem and a 6 star poem?
reply by The Mom/DarleneThomson on 02-Aug-2015
Just one star. 6 stars makes it exceptional and I think 5 stars makes it great. Fanstories lovely rating system. Unfortunately they do not give us enough 6 stars.
Comment from
SilentNinja2930
This is awesome! Good job getting the reader to feel the crushing sadness that the narrator feels. I also liked the alliteration in the beginning with "sweet sunshine smile". Nice use of poetic devices!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
Thanks for the kind revue. What is the difference between a 5 star and 6 star poem?