Power Unleashed
rhyming 1-6-126 total reviews
Comment from lightink
Amazing what how much you managed to get through with such a compact poem form! Positive, inspirational and straight-forward! Thank you for sharing!
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Amazing what how much you managed to get through with such a compact poem form! Positive, inspirational and straight-forward! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
Comment from hannahorion
This poem conforms to the Rhyming 1-6-1 poem. Title: Power Unleashed. Comment: The association between "teach" and "reach" is this. When you teach then "knowledge will span the breach" (gap i.e. the unknown) When you "teach" you fill that unknown (the gap or the breach) with knowledge. So one action is symbiotic with the other. I saw genius in this in realizing this association in the first place. It demonstrates inspiration. I gave it five stars.
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This poem conforms to the Rhyming 1-6-1 poem. Title: Power Unleashed. Comment: The association between "teach" and "reach" is this. When you teach then "knowledge will span the breach" (gap i.e. the unknown) When you "teach" you fill that unknown (the gap or the breach) with knowledge. So one action is symbiotic with the other. I saw genius in this in realizing this association in the first place. It demonstrates inspiration. I gave it five stars.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Mikey,
I really liked this 1-6-1.
Great presentation as always, and you always have something interesting to say.
So much truth in this simple piece. I hope it features well in the competition
Please get back to writing some more prose!
G
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Hi Mikey,
I really liked this 1-6-1.
Great presentation as always, and you always have something interesting to say.
So much truth in this simple piece. I hope it features well in the competition
Please get back to writing some more prose!
G
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
Comment from krys123
Mikey;
-this writing works for me and I felt that your imagination with truly inventive and ingeniously creative.
-Each of your rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept Of each line and the poem as a whole.
-The total topic and concept of your poem is well understood and sends a message.
-Good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you forever.
Alex
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Mikey;
-this writing works for me and I felt that your imagination with truly inventive and ingeniously creative.
-Each of your rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept Of each line and the poem as a whole.
-The total topic and concept of your poem is well understood and sends a message.
-Good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you forever.
Alex
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
Comment from LeslieP5
Yes, knowledge is the key to understanding and passing that knowledge on to others spans generations. Always reach for knowledge! I enjoyed the topic of your 1/5/1 poem.
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Yes, knowledge is the key to understanding and passing that knowledge on to others spans generations. Always reach for knowledge! I enjoyed the topic of your 1/5/1 poem.
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Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
Comment from rama devi
I love the scope of this, Mikey, and your clever rhymes. Makes a strong entry for the contest--especially because the message is so timely and relevant and IMPORTANT! Wit the presentation artwork chosen, I tend to interpret this in terms of our climate crisis--which is so urgent.
Love the set up in your formatting--so effective, with the spacing and the dash works well too, as does the use of CAPS on the closing line. These aspects augment the natural rhythm of the words. Well done!
The presentation colors are also dramatic and effective.
Bravo.
No nits to note. Good luck in the contest.
Love,
rd
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I love the scope of this, Mikey, and your clever rhymes. Makes a strong entry for the contest--especially because the message is so timely and relevant and IMPORTANT! Wit the presentation artwork chosen, I tend to interpret this in terms of our climate crisis--which is so urgent.
Love the set up in your formatting--so effective, with the spacing and the dash works well too, as does the use of CAPS on the closing line. These aspects augment the natural rhythm of the words. Well done!
The presentation colors are also dramatic and effective.
Bravo.
No nits to note. Good luck in the contest.
Love,
rd
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Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
