Comment from angel123

Excellent

Your poem flows and rhymes well and your artwork also goes well with your poem. I enjoyed reading it. Best wishes in the contest.

Angel123

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015

Thank you angel123 for having a read a reviewing my poem a bit of fun Cheers

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a spot on line and syllable count. I'd be grumpy too if I had to dress like that LOL - this is a delightful entry and very well executed. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015

What a delightful review Mystic Angel. Thank you so much for your insight into what I was trying to convey and thanks for your good wishes in the contest Cheers

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This five-seven-five, Baa Baa rainbow sheep, does take an upbeat approach at updating the classic Mother a Goose rhyme. Seeing a blue of green sheep would be cool.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015

thank you Bill for your time to read and review and rate this entry. Very much appreciated Cheers

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Good

LOL funny but disturbing picture. LOL
You did a good job with the syllable count but I don't get the satire part. It is just funny and silly.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015

Hi Gypsy thanks for your review . The satire is that in some circles it is suggested that children sing Baa Baa rainbow sheep instead of Baa Baa black sheep so they won't offend the black community etc ( political incorrectness ) therefore I thought that if Little Bo Peep was looking for her sheep she wouldn't find them if they were rainbow coloured hence the line colour blind to find. Maybe this was too out there and difficult to interpret however just fun having a go anyway. So appreciate your comments hope my explanation helps. Won't do this again. Cheers

Comment from hannahorion

Excellent

Haiku 5-7-5 format. The Subject is "Baa Baa rainbow sheep Would confuse Little Bo Peep" the Observation is "Colour blind to find". The link is that "Bo Peep" can't find her sheep because they are "rainbow" coloured and she is colour blind and is looking for a white sheep (not baa baa black sheep). Confused yet? So is Bo Peep.
This is a very witty if not contorted pun showing some level of genius and inspiration.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015

Thank you hannahorion you have got the exact message I was trying to convey with this so thanks for the great review and encouraging words . I find these a challenges and try to do something different. Thanks again for having a read Cheers

reply by hannahorion on 18-Jul-2015

Glad to be of service. Thank you.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Yes, this is an amusing re-make of the old nursery rhyme - the idea of rainbow sheep is bizarre.

I am confused as well by the last line - who is colour blind - Bo Peep?

Good luck in the contest.

Steve

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015

thank you Kiwisteve for this review. Let me fill you in on why I wrote this. A good while ago there was the suggestion that children shouldn't say Baa Baa Black sheep as it would be offensive to black people so to be politically correct children should now say Baa Baa Rainbow sheep ( I have a real issue with this and think it is ridiculous and wonder why people have to do things like this ) so when I was trying to come up with a different 5-7-5 I thought of this and therefore if Little Bo Peep had lost her sheep then she wouldn't find them if they were coloured so that is where the colour blind came into it. I know a bit bizzare but that is how my mind works at times. Hope that helps to tell you how I came up with this. appreciate your support Cheers

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

rainbow sheep sounds much better:) Little bow (Bo) peep. perfect syllable count. good luck in the contest.
~~teresa~~

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015

Thanks Tab that's me. Thanks for your review and comments and the tip on Bo I kept looking at this thinking something was wrong yes of course it's Bo ( my nana brain ) appreciate you comments and rating Cheers

Comment from Julia.

Good

Dear poet, you've met the 5-7-5 requirements of the poem. I like the first two lines--the concept of rainbow colored sheep is amusing (and I generally dislike sheep, which are the second stupidest creature on this earth).

However, I don't get the last line. "Colour blind to find" to find doesn't make grammatical sense to me. Also the character's name is spelled "Bo" rather than "Bow".

The concept of this is good; it just needs a little tweaking, I think. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015

thank you Julia for you comments and yes of course it is Bo now Bow I kept thinking Bow was wrong ( My nana brain working ) the line colour blind line was referring to Little Bo peep trying to 'find' her sheep and would be difficult it they were rainbow coloured. Just my brain trying to think a bit laterally. Hope this helps to interpret my meaning. Really appreciate your comments though Cheers