Things Change
contest entry45 total reviews
Comment from Belinda
This is very interesting. Reminds me of the novel "Labor Day" which was written through the eyes of a 14 year old boy, especially in the 'puberty' field. No wonder you win, Congratulations!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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This is very interesting. Reminds me of the novel "Labor Day" which was written through the eyes of a 14 year old boy, especially in the 'puberty' field. No wonder you win, Congratulations!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Autumn Splendour
A sweet rendition about coming of age - puberty when life changes are taking place, confusion sets in and emotions turn upside down. Well done and congratulations for winning.
I love the rhythm and the rhyme within the prose.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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A sweet rendition about coming of age - puberty when life changes are taking place, confusion sets in and emotions turn upside down. Well done and congratulations for winning.
I love the rhythm and the rhyme within the prose.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much.
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You are welcome. If you can spare the time, do drop by to read my post, 'The Last Train' about the human condition. I know I sound desperate, but I need three more reviews to make it to Recognized status.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Can see why this coming-of-age well written story is an All-Time Best and contest winner. What boy does not go through this experience? Including having the talk with their Dad about the birds and bees, being lost and confused by what they are told? Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Can see why this coming-of-age well written story is an All-Time Best and contest winner. What boy does not go through this experience? Including having the talk with their Dad about the birds and bees, being lost and confused by what they are told? Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Lance...
_ Congrats on the win. Easy to see why.
_ Days of puberty--indeed!
_ The picture really ties everything together with big brother showing little brother.
_ The rhyming at the end was a good added touch to the poor kids confusion.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Hi, Lance...
_ Congrats on the win. Easy to see why.
_ Days of puberty--indeed!
_ The picture really ties everything together with big brother showing little brother.
_ The rhyming at the end was a good added touch to the poor kids confusion.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much, Jax. It was fun to write.
Comment from LIJ Red
I like the prompts that give the option of calling a very short work poetry or prose.
This post could swing both ways handily. It must be nice to endure puberty now
when teachers and the web and everyone talks freely about it...
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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I like the prompts that give the option of calling a very short work poetry or prose.
This post could swing both ways handily. It must be nice to endure puberty now
when teachers and the web and everyone talks freely about it...
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much
Comment from Jay Squires
Two things I'm wondering, Lance: First why didn't you wait 'till Saturday to post this, so I would have a brand new supply of sixes.
Secondly, and more pertinent to me, why didn't it show up on my queue?
I love your big brother point of view. It's clever, spot on with the changes and feelings we all went through.
I'm not sure even I want to know what went on in the pool.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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Two things I'm wondering, Lance: First why didn't you wait 'till Saturday to post this, so I would have a brand new supply of sixes.
Secondly, and more pertinent to me, why didn't it show up on my queue?
I love your big brother point of view. It's clever, spot on with the changes and feelings we all went through.
I'm not sure even I want to know what went on in the pool.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Jay. This was a blind contest entry, I entered on a whim.
Comment from Clover77
A very well written prose. Congratulations on winning the contest, it was a well deserved win. Good luck on future works!
~Julia
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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A very well written prose. Congratulations on winning the contest, it was a well deserved win. Good luck on future works!
~Julia
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much, Julia
Comment from Spitfire
What a hoot! Thank goodness, the voters recognize quality when they see it. My grandson who turns twelve this month has been experiencing early puberty since eleven. His father and the specialist told him what to expect. He hasn't shown interest in girls yet, but he has stopped letting his almost ten year-old sister getting away with punching him. Now he punches her back! Not hard of course. I love his new man-voice. :-).
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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What a hoot! Thank goodness, the voters recognize quality when they see it. My grandson who turns twelve this month has been experiencing early puberty since eleven. His father and the specialist told him what to expect. He hasn't shown interest in girls yet, but he has stopped letting his almost ten year-old sister getting away with punching him. Now he punches her back! Not hard of course. I love his new man-voice. :-).
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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Thank you
Comment from humpwhistle
Congratulations, Lance. I like this tender bit of brotherly edification.
Usually I'm complaining that free-verse poets are just writing awkward prose with silly line breaks.
You've done something different--and somehow, it doesn't bother me. The rhymes don't detract from the story. In fact, they probably enhance it.
An older brother should find special ways to talk to his kid brother.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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Congratulations, Lance. I like this tender bit of brotherly edification.
Usually I'm complaining that free-verse poets are just writing awkward prose with silly line breaks.
You've done something different--and somehow, it doesn't bother me. The rhymes don't detract from the story. In fact, they probably enhance it.
An older brother should find special ways to talk to his kid brother.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Lee
Comment from Michaelk
I loved it! This story has such a 'Dr. Seuss' feel to it. With a story and a moral, but rhyming all the time. The 'Little bro' theme made it endearing, and I loved that the younger brother was having a lapse in attention.
Him begging the dad to stop telling him about the birds and bees is simply classic.
Congrats on winning the contest. I wish I had a six to give this.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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I loved it! This story has such a 'Dr. Seuss' feel to it. With a story and a moral, but rhyming all the time. The 'Little bro' theme made it endearing, and I loved that the younger brother was having a lapse in attention.
Him begging the dad to stop telling him about the birds and bees is simply classic.
Congrats on winning the contest. I wish I had a six to give this.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much. Glad you liked it.