Comment from Jumbo J

Excellent

Hi Mary,
you know I'm right there with you in the way you think... I suppose over this last year more than any other... life, death, in between... and both sides of it have been rattling around the grey matter... and I know for sure the way of the positive thought and affirmation, way out-weighs the negative thoughts that stunt ones growth or acceptance... that fear is a real buzz killer of peace of the mind... but as you allude to... choice to do so, is the key to be free.

Love this minute poem, and what is contained within its wisdom... all the very best in this contest... yeah, don't be afraid!

With our thoughts we create,
a new understanding,
James vx's.

******Stars!!!!!!

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015

Thanks James I appreciate your lovely words. Mary

Comment from trimple

Excellent

Hi there, Mary

Good to read a poem that makes you feel good afterwards. I have never tried to write a 'minute' but looking at the rules you appear to have executed it wonderfully.


untie the knots'...

I shall remember this line :)


Well done and the best of luck in the contest

Kind regards

trimple :)

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015

Thanks trimple for your excellent review I am glad you got something from it. Mary

Comment from LoannaLois

Exceptional

I just love the synplicity and tone of encouragement in this poem.You used few words to express your feelings and I was caught up in the empowerment it provided!! Loved this.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015

Thanks Loanna for the exceptional review, I am so pleased that you like it. Mary

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I enjoyed your using the Minute poem format for this uplifting verse. I admired your exhortations and your rhymes. (I think "lose" picked up an extra "o" in the final line.) You added the perfect image to reinforce your message. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015

Thanks Joan for your great review I will rectify it now. I appreciate your review.

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Mary;
-I thought your writing to be very inventive and truly creative ingeniously. Each of your rhyming seemed to be contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm flow smoothly. Also, neither of your rhymes were forced nor labored which was often so helpful in the reading.
-Good use of enjambment
-the cadence, timing and tempo were also helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy.
-Your last line of the poem, I question its validity for to me it seems a little trite. And I say this in a very positive manner. Suggestion would be something like: there's nothing to lose.
-Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you forever.
Alex

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015

Thanks Alex for your great review. and for your suggestion, but it would not fit the syllable count, I appreciate it. Mary

reply by krys123 on 16-Jul-2015

You are so welcome Mary.
Alex

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

I really enjoyed, Don't be afraid. It's very up beat and it rhymes beautifully. I think you did an outstanding job with this minute poem.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015

Thanks Gypsy for the encouraging review. Mary

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is yet another interesting and inspirational poem that the author has created with this piece of work. I am trying to live by these ideals. I did a writing course and I am studying for a degree as a mature student

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015

Thanks Tomes, for the great review. and well done to you for taking a degree in writing. Mary

reply by Tomes Johnston on 18-Jul-2015

I did a diploma in writing. The degree is in security management. Take care.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

It is always a good idea to keep a positive attitude. Most of the time my attitude is positive. When I hurt from pain I have a hard time staying positive. Patricia.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015

Hi Patricia, I know it is difficult to be positive when in pain. Pain does drag you down. I have chronic back and neck pain. I work on the positive because the thought of a clinical depression is worse to deal with, I know this from experience. I manage my pain with supports and Ice packs. Mary

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements splendidly. I loved this thoroughly uplifting affirmation of life and walking a path of goodness. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015

Thanks Monica for your very encouraging review. I always appreciate your views.

Comment from Jean Lutz

Excellent

Timely and motivational. As we look around the world there seems to be chaos at every turn. Change comes within -- changing ourselves. May it spread. Best wishes with an entry that says it succinctly.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015

Thanks Jean for your excellent review Mary