Comment from Debbie Noland

Excellent

Excellent haiku. Imagery refers to things seen, felt, and heard. Strong verbs suggest tension--discordant screeching against an almost idyllic background. An air of mystery comes with the word "eerie." A very rich poem made all the more intense by its brevity.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015

Thank you, Debbie, for your great review and kind words for my haiku. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the imagery of the poem.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I was transported to Ireland by the sights and sounds in your poem--pretty amazing with so few syllables and no artwork. Well done! Best wishes in the contest and enjoy summer- Joan

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015

Thank you so much, Joan. I couldn't ask for better compliments for my haiku. I'm thrilled you enjoyed the imagery, and thanks for taking the time to read and share your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by Joan E. on 29-Jun-2015

My pleasure--I thoroughly enjoyed your haiku. Cheers- Joan

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Here in my mind there's a definite view. Maybe because you add to the location by stating that its Irish hills. I see a lot of rolling green hills, and the owl adds a nice touch to it all. Wonderfully vivid! Les

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015

Thank you for your review and comments for my haiku, Les. I'm delighted you enjoyed the imagery. Thanks for reading and taking the time to share your thoughts.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Since I've just reviewed the winner, I know this didn't make it so no use wishing you luck. However, this is strikingly similar to that haiku in tone and content - perhaps they stole it with the addition of alliteration, even though that is not a feature of traditional haiku.

Very evocative imagery and nice haiku structure.

Steve

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015

Thanks for your review and comments for my haiku, Steve. I debated using a banshee in my last line, but thought maybe too many wouldn't get it, so the owl won. Thanks for reading.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Mark Schardine

Excellent

The owl screeches and it means danger lurks. Simply because we see nothing does not mean nothing is going on. Listen carefully or you will learn nothing.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015

Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Mark. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts for the poem.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from zanya

Excellent

Yes an ambiance of mystery and intrigu e created here reminiscent of that dark and deadly time of year around All -Hallows Eve when we are not at all sure where the Spirits reside !!

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015

Thank you for taking the time to read and write a review for my haiku, zanya. I appreciate your comments, and I'm glad you enjoyed the imagery of the poem.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Gone but not forgotten

Excellent

I'm a fan of Haiku. This is a beautiful image, heart-felt and peaceful. Wishing you the best in every contest you enter.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015

Hello wordcraft. I thank you so much for taking the time to read my haiku, write a review, and share your comments. I am curious ... FanStory rating system states that four stars needs improvement. A four-star rating is very acceptable if the reviewer feels improvement is needed, but please take a minute to inform the writer what you think needs improvement. We're all here to learn, so please share your feedback! Thanks so much.

reply by Gone but not forgotten on 28-Jun-2015

Oh, well, I'm new...didn't know that about the four stars. I know that Haiku doesn't have to be exactly 5-7-5, but because I wrote my memoir in Haiku, I'm a bit stuck on that system! Wore the tips off my fingers counting syllables! Still a wonderful work; will re-review!

reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015

Thanks. As I said, I appreciate four stars if there are suggestions where improvement is needed. Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is a lovely poem. I particularly like the reference to Irish hills as I am from the hills of Ireland myself. well done.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015

Thank you for your great review and kind comments for my haiku, Tom. I appreciate your spending some of your time with my poem and for sharing your thoughts.

reply by Tomes Johnston on 28-Jun-2015

My pleasure.

Comment from humpwhistle

Exceptional

Ah, owls have occupied my mind this week, too. But mine didn't screech, he slurred.
I like the mysterious feel of this haiku. It is atmospheric. You capture a place and a moment.
The screech disturbs serenity.
Or that's my read.

Best of luck at the polls.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015

I never expect a gold star for a haiku, so it's always such an honor to get one, and I thank you so much, hw. I'm pleased you liked the atmospheric feel of this. I wanted to use a banshee screeches, but I thought maybe readers wouldn't get it...so used the owl. I like owls that slur better. Thank you for reading and I truly appreciate your kind words.

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

A very good entry for the contest and I like it very much. Lines one and two interconnect well and the third is a good satori, capturing the moment. A good atmospheric haiku in 15 syllables. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015

Thank you for your kind review and comments for my haiku, Dorothy. I'm glad you enjoyed the imagery and thank you for your good luck wish for the contest. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts.