Jaime
A tale of a summer friendship57 total reviews
Comment from sincs87
First piece of literature i have read so far, and im impressed to say the least.
This piece was very catchy and put together perfectly, so well, I felt a sense of nostalgia as if i was the character (Pete).
Love your work : )
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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First piece of literature i have read so far, and im impressed to say the least.
This piece was very catchy and put together perfectly, so well, I felt a sense of nostalgia as if i was the character (Pete).
Love your work : )
Comment Written 12-May-2018
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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Thank you so much for taking the time to find and read ?Jaime.? It is one of my favorite poems and I am thrilled you like it so much. Rod
Comment from Sylvia Kennedy
Wow. What a very nice story in a poem. I was able to visualize your encounter with your Jaime. You pose a very striking desire for me to read your poem; again, and again
reply by the author on 15-May-2017
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Wow. What a very nice story in a poem. I was able to visualize your encounter with your Jaime. You pose a very striking desire for me to read your poem; again, and again
Comment Written 15-May-2017
reply by the author on 15-May-2017
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I am delighted you discovered "Jaime" and have a "striking desire" to read it again and again. I truly appreciate your kind praise and welcome the six-star bonus. Rod
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You are wellcomm
Comment from Rights21
This is a lovely poem with good rhythm and flow. It tells a good story that is structured and reads well. The poem invites the reader in and encourages them to think of their own memories. The details in the poem are very descriptive making it easy for readers to see the story of the poem in they imagination.
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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This is a lovely poem with good rhythm and flow. It tells a good story that is structured and reads well. The poem invites the reader in and encourages them to think of their own memories. The details in the poem are very descriptive making it easy for readers to see the story of the poem in they imagination.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your kind praise. What short-comings did you find to warrant this rating?
Comment from Somers
Wow what a strong poem! I couldn't take my eyes off of the screen for one second! So many young adults can relate to this. It flowed beautifully and had a great story to it. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Wow what a strong poem! I couldn't take my eyes off of the screen for one second! So many young adults can relate to this. It flowed beautifully and had a great story to it. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Somers, I am delighted you prowled through my profile to find "Jaime," and even more pleased you enjoyed it so much. As you can imagine, this poem was fun to write. Thank you for sharing. Rod
Comment from ravenblack
A really charming story poem about first love. I do remember mine and it does indeed feel like a crazy moon about to explode, the lover's moon that mirrored your heart.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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A really charming story poem about first love. I do remember mine and it does indeed feel like a crazy moon about to explode, the lover's moon that mirrored your heart.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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It is fun to share my poetry with those who can remember and relate to the experience narrated. Thank you so much for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Winslow
Dear Rod,
Just a girl but what a friend. If I had a six it would be yours. Nice flow of words like Jamie and you in her canoe. I hope this is a true story. Whatever it truly was a gift. Excellent rhyming too.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Dear Rod,
Just a girl but what a friend. If I had a six it would be yours. Nice flow of words like Jamie and you in her canoe. I hope this is a true story. Whatever it truly was a gift. Excellent rhyming too.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Winslow, for your very kind praise and "virtual" six. Indeed this friendship was a gift. Rod
Comment from pattipac
Sigh, I all out of shiny-six stars, or I'd hurriedly place one on this well crafted narrative poem about the unforgettable childhood friend, and your first kiss. Great imagery and word selection make it shine.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Sigh, I all out of shiny-six stars, or I'd hurriedly place one on this well crafted narrative poem about the unforgettable childhood friend, and your first kiss. Great imagery and word selection make it shine.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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I truly appreciate your "virtual" six and your wonderful praise of "Jaime." Thank you so much for sharing my coming-of-age story, pattipac.
Rod
Comment from lancellot
It is a great tale of a quick summer friendship with a girl both brave and bold. Those are the best kinds when you're young. Well made tale for the summer.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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It is a great tale of a quick summer friendship with a girl both brave and bold. Those are the best kinds when you're young. Well made tale for the summer.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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I really appreciate your description of Jaime as "brave and bold." I hope you don't mind my using that phrase in the sequel I am writing. Thanks for your very kind praise. Rod
Comment from DreamtwithClarity
This is a wonderful piece full of young hope and anticipation for love, life, and freedom. A great experience it sounds like and makes me happy to have read. Thanks for putting this nice piece together. - D.O.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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This is a wonderful piece full of young hope and anticipation for love, life, and freedom. A great experience it sounds like and makes me happy to have read. Thanks for putting this nice piece together. - D.O.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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I really like how you have summarized "Jaime." I am very pleased you did read it and hope to post a sequel soon. Rod
Comment from Showboat
Oh, I loved this one, had a great beat, the word usage was clever and all in all, my favorite kind of poem.
Nothing to add, as I'm no poet,
but when I see good stuff, I sure know it!~
All the best in the contest,
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Oh, I loved this one, had a great beat, the word usage was clever and all in all, my favorite kind of poem.
Nothing to add, as I'm no poet,
but when I see good stuff, I sure know it!~
All the best in the contest,
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Gayle. I truly appreciate such comments from non-poets. Thank you so much for sharing. Rod
