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Comment from BeasPeas
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Hi Marv. Again, an easy read that flows well with an undercurrent of humorous banter that entices the reader to want to follow the story. Marilyn

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2015

reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
    Marilyn
    Thanks for your continued support. A chapter seems better after reading your review. Thanks for the rating.
    Marv
Comment from barkingdog
Excellent
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This was a very interesting chapter. There is a mystery to it as he wonders what this man is like that he's going to see. Will he do right by his screenplay?
I didn't see any errors or need for correction.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2015

reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
    Dear Bark
    Thanks for reviewing and all the stars.
    I'm glad you thought this chapter was interesting. That's a nice compliment.
    Thanks for looking for errors and correction opportunities. Please keep looking.
    I wrote a dog story once. More about that and, more importantly, your dog story, later.
    Marv
Comment from Gone but not forgotten
Good
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I want to know more about both Charles and the "injured party". So Charles works from home...and it's a mansion. That's intriguing. I write at home...and my house is not! I love how nosy the author is...binocs and science references work for me. Thanks.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2015

reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
    Dear Wordy
    Thank you so much for commenting and your rating.
    I also want to say, ?You're welcome.? You hear people say, ?Thank you.? ?No, thank YOU.? etc. You seldom hear, ?You're welcome.?
    More about Charles is coming on the heals of this chapter.
    Please check out Chapter 13 to see how Russ was injured.
    Marv
Comment from Jay Squires
Excellent
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I'm new to this story, Marvin, but growing to like the protagonist and his quest.

Your narrative is conversational and humorous and your dialogue read smoothly. I'll be looking forward to your next chapter.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2015

reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
    Jay
    Thank you for reading Chapter 15. I appreciate the 5* rating. Thanks for the compliments. Chapter 16 is coming soon.
    Marv
reply by Jay Squires on 18-Jun-2015
    As soon as it lands on my virtual doorstep I'll bring it in and brew a pot of coffee.
Comment from JourneyHolm
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I thought this was a pretty good story so far. I liked the insight into young Charles' life as a school boy. I thought that was clever. Thank you for sharing. Keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2015

reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
    Dear Jour
    I am honored that you thought the story was pretty good, so far. I hesitated to include Charles' life as a school boy. Your reaction was reassuring.
    I gladly share all my writing with you. I plan to keep up the good work until this novel is completed.
    Thank you for reviewing.
    I read some of your work and plan to respond to the best of my ability.
    Marv