Get Well, Brooke!
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Comment from Deborah Marie
Good for you; this will tickle Brooke pink... I just love counting poems and this one is extremely creative as seen throughout the wording. Just love the artwork! Thanks for sharing and keep 'em coming. God Bless, Deb
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Good for you; this will tickle Brooke pink... I just love counting poems and this one is extremely creative as seen throughout the wording. Just love the artwork! Thanks for sharing and keep 'em coming. God Bless, Deb
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Deb, thanks so much for the lovely comments and the six stars.
Steve
Comment from w.j.debi
This is an excellent counting poem. It flows so smoothly and tells such a fun tale. I love the humor you have incorporated. This would make a fun picture book for children. Brooke will be proud of you when she reads this one. Really, see if you can publish it.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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This is an excellent counting poem. It flows so smoothly and tells such a fun tale. I love the humor you have incorporated. This would make a fun picture book for children. Brooke will be proud of you when she reads this one. Really, see if you can publish it.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from strandregs
You cheap goat (2 cents)
you can't even promote
a work of art
you old drunkfart (sorry it rhymes)
so here I am in awe
With poem with great flow
no flaw I found
just rhythmic sound
a joy for young and old
a treasure to be sold.
now matey's the time
to write a rhyme
about ten publishers
to immortalize your bubbelicious
:-)).Z.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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You cheap goat (2 cents)
you can't even promote
a work of art
you old drunkfart (sorry it rhymes)
so here I am in awe
With poem with great flow
no flaw I found
just rhythmic sound
a joy for young and old
a treasure to be sold.
now matey's the time
to write a rhyme
about ten publishers
to immortalize your bubbelicious
:-)).Z.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the fun, rhyming review - even the old fart bit!
Publishing - would if I could - not ready to go the self-publishing route at this time and can't seem to get anyone interested the traditional way...
Steve
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Really this is one of your sublime writings
the tip of the top.
Do you go open mike reading belong to a poets group?
If not you should. Its good fun.:-)) Z.
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I live in the country so it's not always easy to get into town. I've been going to a monthly writers' group for a few months now and last month went to an open mic poetry group for the first time - there were only a few people there but I did share some of my poems - I'm not great at it, but could get better perhaps.
Steve
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Good going .
the first time I went I read like a robot.
And was nick named schwarseneger
the second time my hand was shaking
and I almost fainted.
the third rime i went on smiling and had fun.
So knockem dead.you have some awsome stuff.Z.
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Your yo ho, was a delightful tribute to the counting collection that Brooke has amassed. I love these poems and yours is no exception. Great situations, a bit of a ho ho from time to time and ending with an oh no. Fun accompaniment to my morning coffee. I do so enjoy finding your name in my "messages" listing. I'm sure this will give Brooke a giggle too. - Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Your yo ho, was a delightful tribute to the counting collection that Brooke has amassed. I love these poems and yours is no exception. Great situations, a bit of a ho ho from time to time and ending with an oh no. Fun accompaniment to my morning coffee. I do so enjoy finding your name in my "messages" listing. I'm sure this will give Brooke a giggle too. - Wendy
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Wendy.
Brooke should definitely put all hers together in a book - they are wonderful.
Steve
Comment from nancyjam
This is a great counting poem for children and
Brooke will be proud of you.
Excellent meter and fun rhymes as well
as terrific images.
Good job. Nancy
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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This is a great counting poem for children and
Brooke will be proud of you.
Excellent meter and fun rhymes as well
as terrific images.
Good job. Nancy
Comment Written 09-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Nancy - glad you enjoyed this bit of Brooke-ish fun.
Steve
Comment from LIJ Red
Which leads back to a question in a profile thought, just how many Fanstory
members are there? You did well to simmer this one until it was done. It's an
excellent poem.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Which leads back to a question in a profile thought, just how many Fanstory
members are there? You did well to simmer this one until it was done. It's an
excellent poem.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Thank you.
Apparently the chapter numbering for Brooke's book is all out of whack. Phew! I was trying to imagine her slogging her way through 10,000 poems!
Steve
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, kiwisteveh, I love your little counting poem about the pirates. I never thought there was one in me either but it came out of me when brooke was taken away from us, though I hope it's just a short while.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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this is an excellent write, kiwisteveh, I love your little counting poem about the pirates. I never thought there was one in me either but it came out of me when brooke was taken away from us, though I hope it's just a short while.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Thank you - yes, the place just isn't the same without her.
Steve
Comment from Nichola
You did a great job with this counting poem. I bet Brooke's grandson would enjoy this one. I also like the theme of pirates, because children like them too.
I hope that you keep writing these types of poems. I enjoyed this one.
Nichola
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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You did a great job with this counting poem. I bet Brooke's grandson would enjoy this one. I also like the theme of pirates, because children like them too.
I hope that you keep writing these types of poems. I enjoyed this one.
Nichola
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Nichola - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Joy Graham
A very cute childrens counting poem, Steve :) I totally agree with you, they're hard. However, they're so much fun when done. Brooke would be proud. Regarding the chapter numbers, they are way out of whack. I asked Tom to fix it. Maybe need to ask again.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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A very cute childrens counting poem, Steve :) I totally agree with you, they're hard. However, they're so much fun when done. Brooke would be proud. Regarding the chapter numbers, they are way out of whack. I asked Tom to fix it. Maybe need to ask again.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Joy.
I had this alarming image of Brooke trying to slog through 10,000 tribute poems....
Steve
Comment from I am Cat
'not easy finding fresh and original ways to bump off nine pirates and keep it appropriate for young kids. '
LOL, I don't think I"ve laughed quite so hard at author notes before! THAT cracked me up!
And i think, you can make a book as long as you like on the internet! lol
my favorite part:
Four pirates all drank too much rum,
Now here's the mystery...
Just how did one fall overboard?
For that left only three.
I thought this was SO much fun and was reminded of Sea World's show they have in San Antonio called The Pirates of Penzance... It's so much fun and they sing rhymes and they have seals and sea lions and even a cute little otter who is a burglar. lol
I can see the Pirates in Disney's ride Pirates of The Caribbean also chanting a tale like this as they pick off the pirates one by one while you float through...
Brooke will absolutely love this!
Well done!
I wish I had a six to give, I would give it gladly!
Love it!
Cat
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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'not easy finding fresh and original ways to bump off nine pirates and keep it appropriate for young kids. '
LOL, I don't think I"ve laughed quite so hard at author notes before! THAT cracked me up!
And i think, you can make a book as long as you like on the internet! lol
my favorite part:
Four pirates all drank too much rum,
Now here's the mystery...
Just how did one fall overboard?
For that left only three.
I thought this was SO much fun and was reminded of Sea World's show they have in San Antonio called The Pirates of Penzance... It's so much fun and they sing rhymes and they have seals and sea lions and even a cute little otter who is a burglar. lol
I can see the Pirates in Disney's ride Pirates of The Caribbean also chanting a tale like this as they pick off the pirates one by one while you float through...
Brooke will absolutely love this!
Well done!
I wish I had a six to give, I would give it gladly!
Love it!
Cat
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Cat.
Yes, pirates are fun - the imaginary ones anyway! I have a couple of other pirate poems in my portfolio - one recurring character, Cheezel the Weasel, is a retired pirate who gets to go to a Pirates' convention. When I was writing that one I discovered that Saturday Night Live had also done a spoof involving a Pirates' Convention which is on YouTube...
Thanks again for the great review.
Steve